Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE GRAPHS SHOWS THAT NUMBERS OF JOBS SECTORS WHICH ARE IN THE US BETWEEN 1960 TO 2020 IF I WOULD CAMPARE THESE ALL IN THE MAJOR CHANGE IN THIS GRAPH THAT IS HEALTHCARE IN START OF NIGHTYS THAT IS SMOOTHLY RUNS UP AND INCREASE ON THE 2020 ECONOMY CENTRE AND THEN RETAIL RAPIDLY INCREASES 1960 TO MOVE TO 1980 AND STEADILY SATBLE IN THE ERA OF 2020

THE BIGGEST CHANGE IN AGRICULTURE STARTINGLY THEY MOVE SMOOTH UP AND INCREASINGLY VERY WELL, IF TALK ABOUT THE ECONOMY DOWNFALL 1960 THE ECONOMY RATIO GOES ON SLIGHTLY UPWARD THEN SUDDENLY IN DOWN IN 2020 THAT IS THE BIGGEST LOSES IN 2020 NUMBERS OF JOBS AFFECTED VERY BADLY SO OVERVIEW THE INCREASING THE ECONOMY THE HEALTHCARE SECTOR AND BEARLY DOWNFALL SECTOR DECREASING VERY BADLY THAT IS MANUFACTURING DEPARTMENT IN THE US THE IS THE MAIN CAMAPARISION FEATURES OF THIS REPORT THAT IS US INFORMATION BASIS ON SECTORS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the data. The description of trends is confusing and often contradicts the visual information provided in the graph. For example, the claim that agriculture was 'moving smooth up' is inaccurate, and the description of the manufacturing sector is vague and difficult to follow. The response lacks a clear structure, and the information is not presented in a way that allows the reader to understand the main features of the data. The writing is largely descriptive of the writer's own confusion rather than an objective summary of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is poorly organized and lacks logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is almost non-existent, and the transition between ideas is abrupt and confusing. The text is written in two long, dense paragraphs that do not effectively separate the information. The lack of punctuation and the run-on sentence structure make it extremely difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. There is no clear introduction or conclusion, and the overall arrangement of the report is incoherent.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often misused. Phrases like 'smoothly runs up', 'steadily satble', and 'bearly downfall' demonstrate a lack of control over basic academic vocabulary. There is significant repetition of words like 'economy' and 'jobs', and the word choices are often inappropriate for an academic report. Spelling errors, such as 'camapare', 'nightys', 'satble', and 'camaparision', further hinder the clarity of the message. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of basic sentence structure, with many run-on sentences and a complete absence of proper punctuation. Subject-verb agreement is consistently incorrect, such as 'THE GRAPHS SHOWS' and 'NUMBERS OF JOBS SECTORS WHICH ARE'. The use of complex structures is attempted but results in fragmented and ungrammatical clauses, such as 'IF I WOULD CAMPARE THESE ALL IN THE MAJOR CHANGE'. The overall control of grammar is very weak, making the text difficult to read.

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