Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph illustrates the number of jobs in four sectors namely manufacturing, retal, agriculture and healthcare of the economy in the Amarica form 1960 to 2020.
Overall, it is evident that the retal and primary sector showed an upward trend throughtout the period, whereas agriculture followed opposite trend. Moreover, manufacturing recorded the highest jobs in first 2 decades, after that it was declingin gradually.
Looking first at, 15 million jobs proc
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. Because the text is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to report the main features or make necessary comparisons across the full period. The overview is present but lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, you must ensure you complete the analysis of all four sectors and provide a full summary that meets the length requirement, as an incomplete response cannot adequately cover the data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization by using an introductory sentence and an overview paragraph. However, because the text is unfinished, there is no progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall' and 'Moreover' are used, but the abrupt ending prevents a coherent structure from being established. To improve, focus on completing your sentences and using linking words to connect your observations about the different sectors more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'retal' (retail), 'Amarica' (America), 'form' (from), and 'declingin' (declining). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic meaning, the range is narrow and the errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. To reach a higher band, you should focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as using 'fluctuated' or 'remained stable' instead of repeating basic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors, including 'namely manufacturing, retal, agriculture and healthcare of the economy in the Amarica form 1960 to 2020' and 'manufacturing recorded the highest jobs in first 2 decades'. There is a lack of control over articles and prepositions. The sentence structures are simple, and the unfinished nature of the text makes it difficult to assess a range of complex structures. Focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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