Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates the number of jobs in US.
In US, the time period 1960 to 2020 there are four distinct sectors of the economy.
During this time period the job facilities are in millions in England. Mostly jobs are in Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture and Healthcare. The manufacturing is top rated opportunity for people in all years as compare to Healthcare they have less seats for US people in this field. The two facilities for job like retail and agriculture have many up and downs but in 2000 to 2020 they both are increase and have 15 millions jobs for US. In these four sectors the healthcare is being decrease every year. Agriculture and retail both are many years same and the one time they are equally with manufacturing. And the last year 2020 in this time this facility can decrease to 12 million level .There are many number of jobs in the four sectors of economy in the US between 1960 to 2020 year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately report the data presented in the graph. There are significant factual errors, such as claiming the data is about 'England' rather than the US, and misinterpreting the trends (e.g., stating healthcare is decreasing when the graph likely shows a different trend). The overview is missing, and the description of the data is confused and lacks a clear summary of the main features or comparisons. The response does not adequately address the requirements of the task as it misrepresents the provided information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. It is written as a single, disjointed paragraph. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the referencing is often unclear or confusing. The flow of information is erratic, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparison of the four sectors. Paragraphing is absent, which is a requirement for a well-structured report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'top rated', 'facilities', and 'seats' in ways that are not appropriate for an academic report. There is a lack of precision in describing trends, such as 'many up and downs' or 'many years same'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'they both are increase'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. The control of basic grammar is weak, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further detracts from the clarity of the writing.
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