Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided chart give information about the counting of jobs in different sectors of the economy in the US from 1960 to 2020.

Overall, the highest number of the manufacturing and the lowest number of healthcare in starting year but in end it was rising.

Moreover, in 1980 manufacturing counting was 2 and it was growing by year so in the end it is approximately 15 jobs in milliona. Additionally, the agriculture job in 1960 is aroud 6 million but it was decreased by 1980 which contains only 3 million jobs.

Furthermore, the other like retail is 6 million jobs in starting but it shows rapid growth after 1980 and in 2020 it was 16 million job. Secondly, manufacturing is also contain highest jobs in inital year but after 1980 it shows reduction in number of jobs and it is 17 million jobs given in 2000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you identify some trends, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks clarity. For instance, you mention 'manufacturing' twice with conflicting data points, and the description of the trends is often confusing or inaccurate based on the provided graph. The overview is present but lacks a clear summary of the most significant changes. To improve, ensure you accurately extract data points and provide a more structured comparison between the sectors throughout the period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore', they are often used to introduce information that is not clearly linked to the previous sentence. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument. The paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear focus, leading to a disjointed reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrasing such as 'number of jobs' and 'growing by year'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'counting of jobs' instead of 'number of jobs' or 'employment figures', and 'inital year' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more varied and precise terminology related to trends and economic data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The provided chart give', 'manufacturing is also contain') and awkward sentence construction. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are errors in tense usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors causes some difficulty for the reader and prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

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