Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrate information about few jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US from 1960 to 2020.

Overall,15 million jobs have manufacturing in 1960. Despite jobs are increasing in the given period and then decreasing unattenialoy.

In 1960 to 2000 the jobs are much increased however in the given period of years slight difference should take place in jobs in 2020 era. Despite, agriculture have least progressed in 1960 to 2020 . However,in 1960 healthcare probably progressed attentionly .

In 1960 to 1980 agriculture might be offer less jobs and jobs rate falls from 5 million to approximately 3.5 million. About the same ratio in the 2000 year and then might be low changes in the ratio have been occurred. However,In 1960 to 2000 the growth rate of jobs manageably progressed around very huge rate of growth of jobs in health care have been offered.

In conclusion, retail at the present period of graph shows maximum growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The main features are not identified effectively; the description of trends is vague and often factually incorrect based on the provided graph. For example, the claim that '15 million jobs have manufacturing in 1960' is not clearly supported, and the analysis of the other sectors is disjointed and lacks precision. The response lacks a clear overview, and the information provided is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual trends in the US economy over the 60-year period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. While there are paragraphs, the ideas within them do not follow a clear sequence. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or in a mechanical way, such as the repetitive and often misused use of 'However' and 'Despite'. Referencing is unclear, and the transition between sentences is frequently abrupt, which hinders the flow of information. The overall structure is disjointed, making it difficult to follow the writer's intended points about the different economic sectors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several non-existent or misused words, such as 'unattenialoy' and 'attentionly', which impede communication. The writer relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'much increased' instead of 'showed a significant increase'). The lack of precision in word choice makes the report difficult to interpret, and the vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The line graph illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary complexity to convey the information clearly. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These frequent errors make the text difficult to read and demonstrate a limited control over basic grammatical structures.

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