Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the assigned line graph delineates information regarding that the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 to 2020.

overall, it is evident that the manufacturing line an upward trend, and stop them to decrease. ruluil is trend to upward direction. agriculture is is one time decrease and then straight line.

In 1960,healthcare is started point 2 is increase and stop them to 15 point and join the line rubai. In 1980 agriculture is decline and some time then angle is straight and stop them 2000.

In 2000, manufacture is increase and decline then his stop them 2000. and rubai is is also increase and not the decline and stop them 2000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear summary of the main features. The description of the trends is confusing and inaccurate, with phrases like 'stop them to decrease' and 'ruluil is trend to upward direction' failing to convey clear information. The response does not effectively compare the four sectors, and the data points mentioned are difficult to interpret due to poor phrasing. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear overview, and support your points with accurate data from the graph while meeting the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, making the text feel like a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. For example, the transition 'In 1960, healthcare is started point 2' is unclear and does not link effectively to the previous information. To improve, you should use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to connect your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There is significant repetition of basic words like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'stop'. Many phrases are non-standard, such as 'delineates information regarding that the number of jobs' and 'rubai is is also increase'. The lack of precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked') makes it difficult for the reader to understand the data. You need to expand your range of vocabulary by learning specific collocations used to describe graphs and charts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort the meaning. There are consistent issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'healthcare is started point 2', 'manufacture is increase and decline then his stop them'). The use of articles and prepositions is also highly inconsistent. The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word order.

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