Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates that the number of jobs in united kingdoms at a different four sectors in economy from 1960 to 2020.
Overall it can be clearly seen that among four sectors the manufacturing job is rise continously at starting and facing some fluctuations and decrese at end where as agriculture face fall its number of jobs till end.
the number of manufacturing job is top at first with 15 millions and reach its peak with 20millions then it experiences some fluctuations and starting decline its number of job from the year oof1980 till end of 2020 it becomes nearly 10 millions. like wise agriculture at first it has more than 5 millions job in 1960 but time passes it decrease its number of job and face continously downfall till end it remains nearly 3 millions.
The number of job of retail and health care is rising continously from first starting with 5 and 2 millions and reach its peak at 15 millions then after intersection at 2000 year the retail faces some fluctuatios and it crosses its peak and cross more than 15 millions jobs. like wise health care after intersection points it decreases few its job numbers in 1980 but more over it continously rise its jobs and reach its peak similar to retail till end of 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main trends for the four sectors, but there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student claims manufacturing started at 15 million and peaked at 20 million, which does not align with the provided graph. Additionally, the student incorrectly identifies the country as the 'United Kingdoms' instead of the US, as stated in the prompt. While the overview attempts to summarize the main features, the lack of precision in data interpretation and the misidentification of the subject matter prevent a higher score. The response covers all sectors, but the information is not accurately reported.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes confusing, such as the repetitive use of 'like wise' and 'at first'. The progression of ideas is somewhat logical, but the transitions between sentences are often abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the intersection points of the lines. The overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, but the lack of sophisticated linking words limits the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic verbs like 'rise', 'fall', and 'decrease' throughout the text. There are also noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'manufacturing job is rise' instead of 'manufacturing jobs rose' and 'at different four sectors' instead of 'in four different sectors'. Spelling errors, such as 'fluctuatios' and 'continouslly', occur frequently. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'agriculture face fall'), tense usage (e.g., 'manufacturing job is rise'), and article usage. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and errors in number formatting (e.g., 'oof1980'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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