Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graph shows information about number of jobs in four sectors of the US economy from 1960 to 2020. The line graph discuss about different four sectors of the economy like agriculture, manufacturing, retail and health care. The graph describes through x axis and y axis. X Axis shows about the different years like 1960 and 1980 upto 2020 and y axis shows information about different percentage.

The different sectors like manufacturing and retail in 1960 to 1980 play a vital role in the economy of the US and also the different two sectors agriculture and health care perform too low in [redacted phone]. With the passage of time in [redacted phone] the production of manufacturing, retail and health care has been rised and the agriculture sector has stabled itself also the job opportunities had been decreased. Overall, the given line graph shows information of different sectors of economies like manufacturing, retail, agriculture and health care from [redacted phone]. And it also shows the job opportunities over these years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task. While it identifies the four sectors, it lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The description of the data is inaccurate and vague; for instance, it claims the y-axis shows 'percentage' when it represents the 'number of jobs'. Furthermore, the analysis of the trends is superficial and contains factual errors, such as stating that the agriculture sector 'stabled itself' and that job opportunities 'decreased' in the latter period, which does not accurately reflect the provided graph. The response lacks specific data points to support the descriptions, failing to highlight the key features required for a Band 6 or higher.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into two paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is repetitive, and the second paragraph lacks a clear structure, jumping between sectors without a coherent flow. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes incorrect manner, such as the repetitive use of 'the different' and 'the given line graph'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison of trends over the specified time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing like 'shows information about' and 'different sectors'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, such as 'has been rised' (incorrect verb form) and 'stabled itself' (incorrect collocation). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision, and the misuse of terms like 'percentage' instead of 'number of jobs' significantly impacts the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The line graph discuss'), tense usage ('has been rised'), and article usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty. Punctuation is basic, and the overall control of grammar is inconsistent, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band score.

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