Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The floor two floor plans illustrate a college cafeteria before renovation it was went through reconstruction and how it is appearing to now. after significant changes have been made to it.

Overall, Cafe has changed considerably. It has is expanded in terms of seating arrangements, as well as barbecue is added for outdoors. In Staff dining rooms have been changed into designated areas for coffee and for take away food. while serving area has been converted into hot meals. More space is for trash bins. recyclables, more space is reserved in the form of more added bins.

Original layout of the cafe, had staff rooms and a small space for rubbish bin.

There was no outdoor chairs to facilitate guests.

After the cafe has undergone renovations, notable changes have been made to the plan.

In addition to outdoor barbeque, seating have been added with two entry and exit doors.

Salad bar is introduced with extra space for bins. while staff rooms have been ren renamed as take away food as well as coffee bar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response fails to address the task provided. The prompt asks for a summary of a graph regarding job sectors in the US from 1960 to 2020. However, the student has written a description of two floor plans for a college cafeteria. Because the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt, it cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task. While the student does describe the visual information provided (the floor plans), this is a completely different task than the one assigned. Consequently, the response is off-topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, and there is some attempt at logical progression, such as using 'Overall' to introduce a summary and then moving to specific details. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the fragmented sentence 'In Staff dining rooms have been changed...' and the awkward transition 'while serving area has been converted'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing is inconsistent, with some sentences appearing as isolated fragments. Despite the off-topic nature of the content, the internal structure shows a basic attempt at organisation.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'it was went through reconstruction' and 'ren renamed'. The student attempts to describe the changes, but the lack of precision and the presence of errors in word formation and collocation hinder the clarity of the description. While the student manages to convey the basic idea of 'change' and 'renovation', the range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate a higher level of control or flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('seating have been added'), incorrect verb tenses ('it was went through'), and sentence fragments ('In Staff dining rooms have been changed...'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences starting with lowercase letters or being incorrectly separated. These errors are frequent and occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow.

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