Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given line graph depicts the tracks on number of work platforms in four various categories of jobs of the economy in the USA and the given time period between 1960 to 2020.
Overall, it can be conspicuous that, the upward trend was observed in the retail and healthcare department over the period of time. However, the downward trend was notified in the manufacturing and agriculture sectors.
To begin with, as per the graph, manufacturing area was demandable field in initial year and it was peaked at 1980, which was 20 jobs in millions. Meanwhile, after following years of 1980, the growth of the manufacturing sector continuously decreased. In addition to, around 16 jobs in millions was reported in the year 2000 and the work reached merely below 15 jobs in millions.
Furthermore, the second most demandable fields were retail and agriculture and it has similar job platforms in 1960, but after two decades the retail department was jumped to 10 jobs in millions, agriculture sector showed downward trend until the final year. Lastly, healthcare sector was the least department in the 1960 but after following years it shows continuous growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all four sectors and identifies the main trends. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the description of the manufacturing sector as 'demandable' is imprecise, and the data points provided are occasionally vague or lack clear comparison. While the overview identifies the upward and downward trends, it lacks a more sophisticated synthesis of the data. The response addresses the task requirements, but the lack of precision in reporting specific figures and the reliance on informal phrasing limit the depth of the analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Meanwhile', and 'Furthermore' are used to link ideas. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where 'the least department' is used awkwardly. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the flow between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. The student uses non-academic phrasing such as 'work platforms', 'demandable field', and 'the retail department was jumped'. These choices indicate a limited grasp of appropriate collocations for describing economic data. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of repetitive or slightly unnatural word choices prevent a higher score. More precise terminology related to trends and economic sectors is needed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the upward trend was observed' (unnecessary article), 'it was peaked' (incorrect passive voice), and 'the least department' (incorrect adjective usage). Punctuation is generally functional, but the frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense consistency is noticeable. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher band score.
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