Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 to 2020.
As we can see the starting year which is 1960 the manufacturing jobs were in 15 millions on the other sector like Retail and agriculture the jobs around 5 millions and the last sector which is healthcare we can see that the least jobs was there because they just contained between 0-5 millions.
As we can see the healthcare and retail sector gradually increasing the jobs ratio from nearly 5 millions to 15 million and this is a great achievement because in healthcare sector we have to be punctual because its related to live of peoples on the other hand you can see the agricultural ratio goes on decreasing instead of increasing from around 5 millions to 1/2 millions
And this is the bad impact on agriculture sectors
In conclusion I would like to say that us government has to give special attention on agriculture sectors because they are decreasing day by day
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response identifies the main trends, such as the growth in healthcare and retail and the decline in agriculture. However, the analysis is hampered by the inclusion of personal opinions, such as 'this is a great achievement' and 'this is the bad impact', which are inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. The task requires an objective summary of data, not a subjective commentary on government policy or the importance of punctuality in healthcare. Consequently, the response fails to maintain a neutral, analytical tone, and some data points are described vaguely, such as '1/2 millions', which lacks precision.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and repetitive (e.g., 'As we can see' is used twice). The concluding paragraph introduces new, subjective arguments rather than summarizing the key features of the graph. The lack of clear linking words between sentences makes the progression of ideas feel disjointed and mechanical, which hinders the overall readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'jobs', 'sector', and 'increasing'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or descriptors for trends (e.g., 'gradually increasing', 'goes on decreasing'). The student struggles with accurate collocations, such as 'jobs ratio' instead of 'number of jobs' or 'employment figures'. Additionally, there are errors in word formation and usage, such as 'live of peoples' instead of 'lives of people'. The range is insufficient to convey the data with the necessary precision for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the least jobs was there', and incorrect preposition usage, such as 'between 1960 to 2020' (should be 'between 1960 and 2020'). Sentence structures are largely simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing commas and run-on sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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