Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The figure illustrate the comparisiion of job job in four sectors such as Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture and Healthcare economy in United State between 1960 and 2020.

The graph show the years increasing on X-Axis and jobs Trend on Y-Axis in millions. In starting such as in 1960, number of jobs for agriculture job sector are lower than the other sectors while retail and healthcare sector have eqaul job availbility but lower than manufacturing industry. Moreover manufactuirng industutry at same have about fifteen job offer which are more than than the other sectors.

When the years passed and in 1980 healthcare sector's jobs show slighter higher trend but agriculture sector job slightly decrease. Similarly retail and manufacuring sector also show impresively good increase in job trend.

In year 2000, Agriculture sector offered any job, while reatiland healtcare offered much job which can be seen in increasing trend of graph. For the manufacturing sector which show lower trend indicate that decrease in job offers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main trends. The description of the data is often inaccurate; for example, stating that the Agriculture sector 'offered any job' in 2000 is unclear and factually confusing. The report lacks a coherent summary of the key features, such as the significant decline in manufacturing or the steady rise in healthcare. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and the lack of precision in describing the trends makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall picture of the economic shifts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'in 1960' or 'in 2000'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of the data. While there is an attempt to group information, the lack of clear transitions between the sectors and the time periods hinders the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'comparisiion', 'job job', 'eqaul', 'availbility', 'manufactuirng', and 'industutry'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for instance, using 'impresively good increase' is not appropriate for an academic report. The student struggles to use precise terminology for describing data trends, relying on basic and often incorrect phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The figure illustrate', 'The graph show'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures. The response relies almost entirely on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by errors that impede clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the overall control of grammar is weak, which frequently distracts the reader from the intended meaning.

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