Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The figure illustrate the comparision of job job in four sectors such as Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture and Healthcare economy in United State between 1960 and 2020.

The graph show the years increasing on X-Axis and jobs Trend on Y-Axis in millions. In starting such as in 1960, number of jobs for agriculture job sector are lower than the other sectors while retail and healthcare sector have equal job availbility but lower than manufacturing industry. Moreover manufactuirng industutry at same have about fifteen job offer which are more than the other sectors.

When the years passed and in 1980 healthcare sector's jobs show slighter higher trend but agriculture sector job slightly decrease. Similarly retail and manufacuring sector also show impresively good increase in job trend.

In year 2000, Agriculture sector offered any job, while retail and healtcare offered much job which can be seen in increasing trend of graph. For the manufacturing sector which show lower trend indicate that decrease in job offers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the graph but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant trends effectively. While it mentions the four sectors, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that the Agriculture sector offered 'any job' in 2000, which is unclear. The comparison between sectors is underdeveloped and lacks precision. To improve, you should focus on identifying the overall trends (e.g., the decline of agriculture versus the rise of healthcare) and support these with accurate data points from the graph. The response lacks a clear summary of the main features, which is essential for Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical (e.g., 'Moreover', 'Similarly'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between years and sectors. For example, the transition between the 1980 and 2000 data points is abrupt. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and use a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly. Improving the structure of your sentences will help the reader follow your analysis of the trends more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'comparision', 'availbility', and 'manufactuirng'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends precisely; for instance, using 'impresively good increase' is not appropriate for an academic report. You should aim to use more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline'. Expanding your range of academic collocations will help you convey information more professionally and accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The figure illustrate', 'The graph show') and incorrect sentence structures. The use of articles is inconsistent, and there are errors in preposition usage. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often inaccurate, which can impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for common errors like these will significantly improve the clarity and quality of your writing.

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