Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
As clearly view, the graph showed number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US since 1960 till 2020, also gaps between all 20 year. The x axis show different years, and the y axis mean jobs in millions with a scale for 5 million.
In the graphic, there are four types line which dedicate each jobs, including manufacturing, retail, agriculture, healthcare, these four economy arean. And it can be divide three tendency model, such like full-increase, full-decrease, and waves-like.
The retail and agriculture stand for full-increase model, when in 1960 these are the lowest number jobs, but in 2020 its turn into the highest number jobs. Although back to 19060, the numbers of manufacturing was at the top, which have 15 millions, but keeps decrease after 1980, it reflect third industrial revolution and change the enviorment. At least healthcare have less and less people by the time, the unnecessary issue is people care less with their health problem.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph comparing four job sectors in the US between 1960 and 2020. However, the interpretation of the data contains significant inaccuracies and misreadings. For example, the student states that retail and agriculture 'stand for full-increase model, when in 1960 these are the lowest number jobs, but in 2020 its turn into the highest number jobs,' which does not accurately reflect standard trends for agriculture. Furthermore, the mention of '19060' and the interpretation of manufacturing data indicate flawed data reporting. The overview attempts to group trends into categories ('full-increase, full-decrease, and waves-like'), but the lack of accurate data selection places this performance at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs with an introductory overview and subsequent body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward referencing and mechanical cohesive devices. Phrases like 'As clearly view,' 'In the graphic,' and 'At least healthcare' do not function effectively as transitional or introductory markers. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty, resulting in a choppy and disjointed reading experience. This level of organization and cohesive control aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terminology and literal translations, resulting in unnatural collocations and word choices such as 'full-increase model,' 'waves-like,' and 'economy arean.' There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including 'enviorment' instead of environment and 'decrease' used where a noun or past participle is required ('keeps decrease'). While the response is minimally understandable, the lexical inadequacies restrict the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive marking for attempt at topic-specific words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is very low. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure throughout the response. Examples include 'the graph showed number of jobs,' 'the x axis show different years,' and 'the unnecessary issue is people care less with their health problem.' Prepositional usage and clause construction are also frequently faulty, leading to sentences that strain meaning and require the reader to guess the intended message. This profile corresponds to a Band 4.0 descriptor.
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