Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
he graph illustrate the number of jobs in four different sectors in US.
overall, the economy of the manufacturing shows a substantial change from 1960 to 1980 and then decrease upto the 2020.
the least marginally decrease in the agricultural economy. it begins from the 5 millions in 1960 and stay constant till the 2020. meanwhile the other two sectors increase significantly at a same level 1960 to 2020.
the employment rate in manufacturing sector went upward at the 20 millions in 1980. and decline gradually till 2020.
the retail and health care jobs remains stable and shows equal change such as starting at the minimum amount and significantly increase throughout the next upcoming years.
the least change were shown in the agricultural sector statriting point same as the retail sector but dropped off through out the years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main trends in the four sectors, noting the rise and fall of manufacturing, the stability of agriculture, and the growth of retail and healthcare. However, the text falls short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 138 words. This has a direct negative impact on Task Achievement. Furthermore, some data points are inaccurate or poorly supported, such as stating that agriculture begins at 5 million and stays constant, and the descriptions of trends are occasionally vague or contradictory. Ideas are under-developed due to the lack of sufficient detail and missing data comparisons. Consequently, the response earns a band score of 5.0 for partially addressing the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The student attempts an overall introduction ('overall, the economy of the manufacturing shows...') and organizes the response into several short paragraphs. However, paragraphing is poorly structured and disjointed, with single sentences often forming isolated blocks. Cohesive devices are weak, repetitive, or misused ('meanwhile', 'such as'). The progression of ideas lacks clarity, and referencing is frequently confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact relationships between the sectors being discussed. This level of organization aligns with a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'increase', 'decrease', 'change', and 'sectors'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and phrasing, such as 'the economy of the manufacturing', 'the least marginally decrease', and 'statriting point'. These lexical limitations and errors lead to awkward phrasing and occasional strain for the reader. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic, it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands, fitting a band score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences. Attempts at complex sentences or clauses are frequently faulty, plagued by missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and tense confusion (e.g., 'the retail and health care jobs remains stable', 'the least change were shown'). There is a complete lack of capitalization at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns (e.g., 'he graph', 'us'), along with spelling mistakes like 'statriting'. Frequent grammatical errors cause some difficulty for the reader, justifying a band score of 5.0.
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