Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provide graph illustrates the layout of four different sector of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020 for their jobs in the companies.
Overall it can be seen that, in the given all the four sector majority of Healthcare in all the 40 years for the jobs in millions attended are hiking at peak level. However, the Agriculture which was now leat popular at given all the year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 71 words. Consequently, the information provided is severely restricted, and the main features of the graph cannot be fully covered or developed. While the student attempts an overview and mentions two general trends—identifying healthcare as the highest sector and agriculture as the lowest—the lack of length and detail prevents a fully satisfactory task completion. According to the descriptors, the response falls into the lower bands due to the under-developed nature of the task and failure to meet the basic length constraint, restricting the task achievement score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The writing is divided into a brief introduction and an overall summary paragraph, but the lack of length limits the organizational structure. There is an attempt at cohesive transitions, such as 'Overall it can be seen that' and 'However', which helps signal logical relationships. However, referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical flow between ideas is disrupted by the fragmented and incomplete sentences, such as 'However, the Agriculture which was now leat popular at given all the year.' Progression is heavily constrained by the extreme brevity of the text, placing it within the lower-middle band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and basic. The student attempts topical vocabulary with words like 'sector', 'economy', 'Healthcare', and 'Agriculture', but makes noticeable errors in word choice and morphology, such as 'sector' instead of 'sectors', 'leat' instead of 'least', and 'attended' instead of achieved or recorded. Phrasing such as 'hiking at peak level' is unnatural and inaccurate for describing economic data over time. Because the vocabulary is repetitive and contains errors that cause some difficulty for the reader, it aligns with a Band 5.0 lexical profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
Grammatical control is weak throughout the short text. There are significant errors in basic sentence structure, article usage, and prepositions. For instance, 'The provide graph' contains a tense error ('provided'), and 'in the given all the four sector majority of Healthcare in all the 40 years for the jobs in millions attended are hiking at peak level' is an extremely convoluted and ungrammatical sentence structure. Complex structures are attempted unsuccessfully, and frequent basic errors disrupt communication, limiting the grammar score.
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