Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given liner graph illustrates the information about the number of jobs in distinct sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
overall,it is evident that the highest figure of jobs in the us was in manufacturing sector;while,the least was agriculture .noticeablly,it faced diffrent variations
from an overall analysis, a considerable figure of jobs was in sector of manufacturing in year 1980. The figure stood at 20.Which went down consistently till 2020 by 6millon . in case of retailing ,initially it was around 5 million jobs then recorded a steadily inclined to 2000.In 2020,the captured figure was over 15 millon jobs .
Probing ahead , in terms of agricultural before decreasing to 3 millon it was over 5 millon jobs then faced a gradual decline the last figure was 3 millon in 2020. healthsector suged from 3 millon to 15 millon jobs and it recored the most inciline in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying key trends and sectors such as manufacturing, retailing, agriculture, and the health sector. An overview is attempted right at the beginning, noting the highest and lowest points overall. However, some data points contain inaccuracies or are poorly specified, such as the statement regarding manufacturing standing at 20 in 1980, which lacks clear scaling context, and minor contradictions in the agricultural data description. The selection of data is generally relevant, but the development of comparisons is somewhat superficial. The response meets the minimum length requirement, and ideas are adequately presented to achieve a Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by extremely poor punctuation, uncapitalized sentences, and a lack of proper cohesive devices. Transition phrases like 'Probing ahead' are awkward and unnatural for an Academic Task 1 response. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, and paragraphing conventions are poorly managed due to run-on thoughts and fragmented sentences. Overall, the structural flow is basic and mechanical, fitting the descriptors for Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, featuring basic terms such as 'jobs', 'sector', 'figure', and directional verbs like 'went down', 'decline', and 'inciline' (inclining/increase). There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'liner' instead of 'linear', 'noticeablly', 'diffrent', 'millon', and 'suged' (surged). Less common lexical items are attempted with frequent inaccuracy, and these flaws occasionally cause strain for the reader. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, corresponding to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple sentence structures and attempted complex forms. However, grammatical accuracy is very weak. There are persistent punctuation and capitalization errors, such as starting sentences with lowercase letters ('overall,it', 'noticeablly'). Sentence boundaries are frequently ignored, resulting in fragments like 'which went down consistently till 2020 by 6millon' and run-on structures. Verb tense consistency and prepositions are also handled inaccurately in several places. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level of control.
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