Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph gives the information about the number of jobs in sectors like manufacturing,retail,agriculture and heathcare of the econmy in US between the year of 1960 and 2020.Units measured in millions.

overall,the given graph is about the million of jobs in sectors like manufacrtruing and heathcare is decreased and retail and agricuilture is increase in difference years between 1960 and 2020 in US.

The munufactruing sector in 1960 was with 15 millions jobs and its increased in 1980 almost 20 millions but in 2000 its start to decrease up to 15 millions and in 2020 it was almost up to 10 million.The heathcare jobs in 1960 was up to 5 millions but in 1980, 2000 and in2020 its decrase less then 5 millions.

Moreover the jobs in agriculture sector in 1960 was less then 5 millions but in the year 1980 its was 5 million ans in 2000 it was 15 million and in 2020 it was 15 millions .Also Retail jobs in 1960 was up to 5 million and in 2020 it was up to 15 millions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph regarding the four economic sectors in the US between 1960 and 2020. However, the student struggles with accurate data reporting and over-generalises or misinterprets trends. For example, the writer claims that healthcare jobs decreased to 'less then 5 millions' when the graph actually shows growth, and states manufacturing went up to 20 millions in 1980 before dropping, which is generally accurate, but overall data points lack precision. The overview contains noticeable inaccuracies regarding which sectors increased or decreased. Because some data is inaccurately reported and key comparisons are partially flawed, the response fits the Band 5 profile where the task is addressed only partially and key details are under-developed or inaccurate.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific sectors. However, overall progression is hindered by poor referencing and mechanical cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Also', and 'The munufactruing sector in 1960 was with...'. Paragraphing is visibly weak, with single-sentence paragraphs disrupting the flow of the overview. Pronoun referencing and logical sequencing within sentences are frequently faulty, making it sometimes difficult to follow the progression of information. These issues align closely with Band 5 descriptors, where there is some organisation but no clear overall progression, and cohesive devices are inadequate or inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and basic, with frequent spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'heathcare', 'econmy', 'manufacrtruing', 'munufactruing', 'agricuilture', 'decrase', 'ans'). The vocabulary is repetitive, heavily relying on basic terms like 'jobs', 'sector', 'increased', and 'decreased'. While the student attempts topic-specific vocabulary related to the economy and employment sectors, the high density of spelling mistakes and lack of less common lexical items restrict the score. These characteristics reflect Band 5, where the vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, but noticeable errors cause difficulty for the reader and constrain flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student uses a very limited range of sentence structures, primarily relying on simple sentences or awkward attempts at complex or compound structures that frequently result in ungrammatical forms (e.g., 'The graph gives the information about...', 'manufacturing sector in 1960 was with 15 millions jobs', 'its start to decrease'). Punctuation and capitalization are also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods, and lowercase letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'overall,the given graph...'). Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('jobs... was', 'healthcare jobs... was') and tense usage persist throughout. This performance corresponds to Band 5, featuring a limited range of structures and frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede understanding.

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