Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the number of jobs in four sctors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020. In Healthcare, sectors the number of jobs increse zero to 4.8 millions in 1960 and step by step the numer of jobs in health care sector increase year by year in million.
Overall the graph shows that jobs in many sectors like Healthcare and Agriculture increase and decrease year by year . Summarize, the Healthcare sectore going so good in 1960 to 2020, the jobs in healthcare sectore increased.About Agriculture, In the US the job decrease between 1960 to 2020.
Number of jobs frequently increased in Healthcare, sectors 3 to 15 millions people takes jobs in this sector. so, In Healthcare sectore the graph shows that people takes much jobs between 1960 to 2020.
In the US, the graph shows the job of Agriculture, Starting in 1960 peoples have 5.1 millions job in this sector but after awhile year by year the job of Agriculture decreased due to some inflamation of economy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to present an overview of the graph comparing four sectors, noting trends in Healthcare and Agriculture. However, the information is presented in a very confused and repetitive manner. For instance, the student states 'In Healthcare, sectors the number of jobs increse zero to 4.8 millions in 1960' and later mentions 'sectors 3 to 15 millions people takes jobs', which contains inaccurate figures and lacks clear, structured reporting of the main features or comparisons. Important sectors are omitted or mentioned only vaguely. This performance aligns with Band 4.0 as the information is poorly selected and lacks clear development, making it difficult to fully understand the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a lack of overall logical progression. While there is a rudimentary attempt at grouping ideas into paragraphs, the sentences within these paragraphs lack clear connections and sequencing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as repetitive and awkward transitions ('Summarize, the Healthcare sectore going so good', 'About Agriculture, In the US the job decrease'). Paragraphing is poorly controlled, and referencing throughout the text is unclear, causing the reader to struggle to follow the relationship between ideas. This corresponds to Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is very limited, repetitive, and basic. Words are frequently misspelled or misused, such as 'sctors' instead of sectors, 'increse' instead of increase, 'sectore', and 'inflamation' instead of inflation (or a reference to economic changes). The student constantly relies on simplistic phrasing like 'jobs in many sectors like Healthcare and Agriculture increase and decrease year by year' and 'people takes much jobs'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors impede communication. This reflects a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence attempts. There are frequent, major errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction, such as 'Starting in 1960 peoples have 5.1 millions job' and 'the job of Agriculture decreased'. Punctuation is also erratic and basic. These persistent errors frequently cause strain and confusion for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 profile where errors are frequent and often distort meaning.
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