Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The provided line graph shows that the US's number of jobs in four sectors depend on the economy from 1960 to 2020. Units measured in millions for all sectors.

Overall, when compared the final and the initial year, except from healthcare and retail sectors, manufacturing and agriculture sector decreased significantly.

The number of manufacturing sector increased substantially from 15 million in 1960 to 20 million in 1980. However, this data fell considerably at below 15 million in 2020. Additionally, the quantity of agricultural sector reached a peak with approximately 5 million in 1960. Unfortunately, its number dropped greatly in 1980 and remained unchanged untill 2020.

Turning to the retail sector, its data rose considerably from around 5 million in 1960 to about 15 million in 2020. Similarly, healthcare sectors index increased from around 0 million in the initial year to 5 million in 1980, after that, its index climbed sharply to 15 million in the final year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

Talaba 1960 va 2020 yillar oralig'idagi to'rtta sektorning asosiy xususiyatlarini tanlash va ularni hisobot shaklida berish orqali topshiriqning barcha qismlarini qamrab olishga harakat qilgan. Ikkinchi xatboshida umumiy sharh berilgan bo'lib, unda sog'liqni saqlash va chakana savdoni ishlab chiqarish hamda qishloq xo'jaligiga qarama-qarshi qo'yish orqali tendentsiyalar guruhlarga bo'lingan. Biroq, xulosada ma'lumotlar tendentsiyalari bo'yicha noaniqliklar mavjud; masalan, matnda ishlab chiqarish 1980 yilda 20 milliongacha sezilarli darajada oshgani va keyin 2020 yilda 15 milliondan pastga tushib ketgani da'vo qilingan, ammo ayrim traektoriya tafsilotlari noto'g'ri tavsiflangan. Qolaversa, kirish qismida ish o'rinlari 'depend on the economy' ekanligi aytilgan, bu biroz chalkash ibora. Umuman olganda, javob topshiriqqa yetarli darajada javob beradi va asosiy qiyosiy xususiyatlarni ta'kidlab, Band 6.0 ballga loyiq ko'rilgan.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

Javob to'rtta xatboshiga bo'lingan bo'lib, ular kirish, umumiy sharh va ma'lum sektorlarga bag'ishlangan ikkita asosiy xatboshini o'z ichiga oladi. Asosiy umumiy rivojlanish mavjud bo'lib, muallif 'Overall', 'However', 'Additionally' va 'Turning to the retail sector' kabi ba'zi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalangan. Biroq, bog'liqlik ba'zan mexanik yoki biroz xato, bu biroz noqulay o'tish iborasida ko'rinadi ('after that, its index climbed sharply'). Xatboshilarga ajratish asosiy tafsilotlarni umumiy sharhdan ajratish uchun o'rinli qo'llanilgan, ammo yuqori darajaga erishish uchun havola qilish va mantiqiy oqim silliqroq bo'lishi mumkin edi. Ushbu ko'rsatkich Band 6.0 ga mos keladi.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Talaba topshiriq uchun lug'at boyligining yetarli darajasini namoyish etib, 'significantly', 'substantially', 'considerably', 'peak' va 'approximately' kabi so'zlarni muvaffaqiyatli kiritgan. Ba'zi sezilarli leksik xatolar va noqulay iboralar mavjud, masalan, 'manufacturing sector increased' ('employment in the manufacturing sector' o'rniga), 'this data fell' ('this figure fell' o'rniga) va 'healthcare sectors index'. Imlo odatda to'g'ri va lug'atdan foydalanish muloqotga xalaqit bermaydi, garchi yuqori darajalar uchun talab qilinadigan moslashuvchanlik va aniqlik yetishmasa ham. Bu aniq Band 6.0 darajasida turibdi.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

Talaba ergash gaplar va qiyosiy tuzilmalardan foydalangan holda sodda va murakkab gap shakllarining aralashmasini sinab ko'radi. Biroq, matn davomida bir nechta grammatik xatolar va noqulay tuzilmalar mavjud. Misollar quyidagilarni o'z ichiga oladi: 'when compared the final and the initial year' (majburiy nisbat yoki predlog yetishmayapti), 'untill' (imlo xatosi) va 'at below 15 million' dagi noto'g'ri predlog tanlovi. Ushbu xatolar umumiy muloqotga to'sqinlik qilmasa-da, muallifning Band 7.0 ga erishishiga to'sqinlik qiladigan darajada tez-tez uchraydi. Grammatika va tinish belgilarini nazorat qilish Band 6.0 ga mos keladi.

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