Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The ligne graph illustrate information about the number of jobs in four sector of the economy in the US between 1960 to 2020

It can be clearly seen that, manufacturing sector was grow up in 1960 the rate of job 15%and hit 19% aperoxmitaly, in 1980, afterthat the rate of jobs were continousely fall,in 2020 the job rate is 13% aperoxmitaly.Further the number of jobs in retail in 1960 that was 6% and rate of jos is continousely grow up and in 2020, rate of jobs that was 17% aperoxmitaly .

probing ahead, the rate opf jobs in agriculture in 1960, that was 7% aperoxmitaly and in following years the rate of job was drop consistantly, in 2020 the rate of job that was 3% aperoxmitely. in addition the rate of job in healthcare, in 1960 that was 4% around and the number of job is continusely grow and in 2020 the rate of job that was 17% round about.

overall, manufacturing sector in starting was grow up but after regular down. Alought agriculture sector was continousely drop. However, retail sector was continousely increase semilarly healthcare sector was continousely grow up.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover the main trends in the four sectors shown in the graph between 1960 and 2020. Key data points are mentioned, such as the manufacturing sector starting at 15% in 1960 and peaking around 19% before declining to 13%, and retail growing from 6% to 17%. However, the overview is weak, consisting merely of fragmented sentences at the end rather than a cohesive summary of major trends. Furthermore, numerous data inaccuracies and spelling mistakes (such as 'aperoxmitaly') make the reporting less precise, placing this response at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are frequently disrupted by poor transitions and awkward phrasing like 'probing ahead'. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a mechanical and disjointed feel. Referencing is often unclear, with pronouns and relational phrases failing to connect ideas smoothly. While the reader can generally discern which sector is being discussed, the lack of sophisticated cohesive control restricts the score to Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on simple terms like 'rate of job', 'grow up', and 'drop'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the response, including 'ligne', 'aperoxmitaly', 'continousely', 'Alought', and 'semilarly'. Less common lexical items are rarely attempted, and when they are, inaccuracies in word formation and collocation impede fluency. This vocabulary profile aligns with Band 4.5, rounded up to 5.0 for attempting to describe economic data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. There is a persistent lack of control over basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation (e.g., run-on structures and missing periods/commas). Examples include 'the manufacturing sector was grow up' and 'in 1960 that was 6% and rate of jos is continousely grow up'. Frequent errors cause considerable strain for the reader, matching the descriptors for Band 4.

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