Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line charts elaborate the information about jobs and economy in four different departments in the year 1960 to 2020.
Overall, during the period healthcare and retail was constantly rose. However, manufacturing sector was slightly up and down. In adverse, agriculture was decling over the time.
In 1960, healthcare starts around 2 millions and it increased to 3 millions in 1980. Between 1980 and 2020 it dramatically increased to 16 millions jobs. In 1960, retails was 5 millions and it reached as similar as healthcare in 2020. It was slightly rais in 2000 to 2020.
Moreover, in manufacturing jobs was initiated from 15 millions and in 1980 it reached toward 20 millions, continously draw down 14 millions respectively which mean it decreased from the starting points. Agriculture jobs started from 6 millions and in 20 years it drop down around half of the starting. From 1980 to 2020 it drawn around 1 precent which good from all other factors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the prompt by summarizing the main features of four sectors in the US economy between 1960 and 2020. An overview is provided, noting that healthcare and retail rose while manufacturing fluctuated and agriculture declined. However, the data points selected contain notable inaccuracies and lack precision. For example, stating that retail reached 'as similar as healthcare in 2020' is vague, and several figures regarding job numbers and timelines (such as 'Agriculture jobs started from 6 millions and in 20 years it drop down') do not accurately reflect the visual data provided. The response covers the main trends broadly, but the inaccurate reporting of specific data points restricts the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific sectors. However, the progression is disrupted by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as 'In adverse, agriculture was decling over the time' and 'Moreover, in manufacturing jobs was initiated'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and transitions between sentences feel abrupt. While paragraphing is used, the lack of smooth logical flow and awkward linking devices place this performance within Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate basic vocabulary to discuss economic sectors and employment trends, employing terms like 'departments', 'healthcare', 'retail', 'manufacturing', and 'agriculture'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'decling' instead of declining, 'rais' instead of rise, and 'continously draw down' instead of continuously dropped. The use of 'departments' instead of sectors is also unnatural. These noticeable errors and limited control of word formation restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but these are frequently marred by basic grammatical errors. Examples include tense confusion and subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'retail was 5 millions and it reached', 'in manufacturing jobs was initiated', and 'which good from all other factors'. Punctuation is generally functional, but grammatical inaccuracies are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in grasping the intended meaning, aligning with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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