Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph illustrates the information about four US economies sectors as manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare about the number of jobs from year 1960 to 2020.
Overall, retail secor was at highest in initial years while healthcare had least employees in later years heath are surpass retail sector.
To begin with retail sector which was the most demanding job sector in 1960 with 15 million jobs. After two decadeds it peaked at 20 million and after that it plunged and lastly stoped at around 13 million jobs. Furthermore, in 1960 healthcare was least job sector near 3 million significant growth and reached over 15 million in last year.
Moving further, retail and agriculture jobs were at approximately 6 million in the beggning, retail sector showed a sharp increase till year 2000 and noticed at 15 million after it slightly increased and stoped same as healthcare. whereas agriculture accupatuon become less popular and decreased over time in 2020 it remain only as 3 million jobs sector.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, identifying the four economic sectors and tracking their employment trends between 1960 and 2020. An overview is attempted, noting the shifts in popularity such as retail initially leading and healthcare growing significantly. However, the student confuses the categories in places, such as mentioning 'manufacturing' in the introduction but omitting it later, and confusing manufacturing, retail, and agriculture trends in the body paragraphs. Key data points are mentioned, such as 15 million for retail and 3 million for agriculture, but some figures are imprecise or misallocated. This results in an uneven coverage of the data, aligning best with a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, starting with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing transitions and unclear referencing. For instance, the overview contains a confusing fragment ('heath are surpass retail sector') and body paragraphs feature run-on ideas without clear connections. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, as seen in phrases like 'To begin with retail sector which was...' and 'Moving further, retail and agriculture jobs...'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion and referencing are faulty, warranting a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary adequate for basic reporting, such as 'jobs', 'sector', 'increase', and 'decreased'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'secor' for sector, 'heath are' for healthcare, 'decadeds' for decades, 'stoped' for stopped, 'beggning' for beginning, and 'accupatuon' for occupation. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted lexical control, capping the performance at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent structural errors and missing verbs or prepositions, such as 'retail secor was at highest in initial years', 'healthcare had least employees', and 'agriculture accupatuon become less popular'. Clauses are frequently strung together without proper punctuation or conjunctions (e.g., 'Furthermore, in 1960 healthcare was least job sector near 3 million significant growth'). These errors frequently impede communication and place the grammar at a Band 5.0 level.
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