Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart tells about the information about 4 economic sectors of United States.In this graph, we saw two axises i.e., x and y axises.X-axsis shows time in the sense years and Y-axsis shows jobs in millions.The manufacturing ratio of the graph tell us about it's increasing or well growth of jobers while retails ratio was not grown intially.Futhermore, with the passage of time it increased in 20's and it's growing higher and higher and Agriculture scale does not provide good sort of information other than others.Health care situation is not gone yet the long run about 1960 to 2000 but now it's being and controlled sustained.Retail and Healthcare are now on the same page or on the meeting position and balance each other.Subsequently, agriculture down fall is bigger than all the other aspects of the graph. We can say that number of job are relatively lesser than any other field.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the chart, mentioning several sectors such as manufacturing, retail, agriculture, and healthcare. However, the interpretation of the data is often imprecise, confused, or overly informal (e.g., describing healthcare as 'being and controlled sustained' or retail and healthcare as 'on the meeting position'). Furthermore, there is no proper introductory overview outlining the main overarching trends, which is a key requirement for a Band 6 or higher in Academic Task 1. Important comparative features are stated rather vaguely. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, aligning with Band 4.5 to 5.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe issues with paragraphing and overall logical progression. The response consists of one single, unbroken block of text instead of distinct paragraphs for an introduction, overview, and body details. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with clumsy transitional phrases like 'Futhermore' and 'Subsequently'. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'it's growing higher and higher and Agriculture scale does not provide good sort of information other than others'). The lack of proper structuring and mechanical cohesion limits the text to a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Vocabulary usage is very basic, repetitive, and at times non-standard or incomprehensible (e.g., 'jobers', 'axises', 'x-axsis', 'meeting position', 'down fall'). While the writer attempts to use subject-specific vocabulary like 'manufacturing', 'retails', 'Agriculture', and 'Health care', the lexical control is weak, and spelling mistakes are noticeable ('Futhermore'). The limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical inaccuracies mean the response struggles to meet the requirements for Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex structures. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions, run-on structures, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'This chart tells about the information', 'we saw two axises i.e., x and y axises', 'number of job are relatively lesser'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, with missing spaces after periods. These frequent errors cause significant strain for the reader, placing the grammar at a Band 4.0.

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