Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the line graph reprents the information about the economy in the US job market in four sectors(Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture, Helathcare) between 1960 and 2020.jobs are represtated in millions.
Overall, manufacturing registed highest with 20M in 1980 and Healthcare around 3M in 1960. there is constant growth in Retail and helthcare and fall in Agriculture and manufacturing.
coming to the Healthcare and retail from 1960 it was noted around 3M and 6M and rised nearly 16M in 2020. when we observe healthcare rosed 5 times and retail rosed to 3 times .
agriculture falls from nearly 6M to 2M from 1960 to 1980 and remais nearliy same in remaining years. manufacutring went to 20M with highest among all sectors in year 1980 and continuos fall in rest of years . when we carefully have a look retail and manufucature are went above 15M but only agriculture falls below 3M. these are the jobs in millions happend in US
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting information about the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. An overview is present, noting the general trajectories such as the growth in Retail and Healthcare and the fall in Agriculture and Manufacturing. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data, such as stating that manufacturing registered its highest point with 20M in 1980 (which is correct) but misstating healthcare in 1960. Furthermore, data points like 'healthcare rosed 5 times' lack precise referencing. The reporting is somewhat disorganized and lacks a fully developed selection of main features, placing this performance at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text suffers from poor paragraphing and formatting, with ideas lumped together awkwardly and several sentences lacking proper capitalization and punctuation (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters like 'the line graph...', 'overall...', 'coming to...'). Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, often relying on colloquial transitional phrases like 'coming to' or 'when we observe'. While there is some progression of ideas across the sectors, the lack of clear logical organization and poor control over basic punctuation and paragraph structuring restricts the cohesion to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on general readability.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'reprents', 'represtated', 'registed', 'helthcare', 'rosed', 'remais', 'manufacutring', 'continuos', and 'happend'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with notable inaccuracy in word choice and spelling. The repetition of basic verbs like 'went', 'falls', and 'rosed' restricts the vocabulary to a level where communication is occasionally strained by spelling mistakes, aligning with the Band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are persistent grammatical errors, missing articles, and subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'manufacturing registed highest', 'there is constant growth in Retail and helthcare and fall', and 'retail and manufucature are went above 15M'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with run-on sentences and missing periods. Because errors are frequent and cause some difficulty for the reader while simple structures dominate, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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