Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph demostrates the details regarding the amount of occupations in four various category from 1960 to 2020. the amount of jobs are measure in million.
Overall, it can be seen that manyfactured having the highest amount of jobs in the starting , however healthcare centre showed a sharp growth amongest sector.
In 1960, manufacture sector was the highest job giving sector of around 15 million and it reached at 20 million in 1980, after then there was only decreased in the amount of jobs Meanwhile, agriculture sector stared at approximatly 5 million jobs but it had suddenly followard downward trand till 1980. after that this sector had the least amount of jobs by 2020 which was about 3 million.
In contrast , retail was at the starting point of 5 million jobs in 1960 , but was having the sharp increased till 2020 speed became steady increased in 2000 . Moreover , healthcare centre was at lowest on the starting which was around 2 million ans it showed a highest growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. An overview is attempted, noting that manufacturing started the highest and healthcare showed sharp growth. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reading the data from the graph; for instance, the student states retail started at 5 million and agriculture at 5 million, whereas the graph shows retail at 6 million and agriculture at 6 million in 1960. Additionally, the phrasing 'job giving sector' is awkward. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precise data reading and minor confusion in data points place this response at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into logical paragraphs with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs covering different sectors. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 1960', 'Meanwhile', and 'In contrast' are used to structure the text. However, referencing and transitions are sometimes clumsy or mechanical (e.g., 'after then there was only decreased', 'stared at approximatly'). Paragraphing is present and helps separate ideas, but the overall progression of information feels disjointed at times due to fragmented sentences. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is relatively limited and repetitive, with frequent word-form and spelling errors (e.g., 'demostrates', 'manyfactured', 'stared', 'approximatly', 'followard', 'trand'). Phrasings like 'amount of occupations', 'four various category', and 'job giving sector' are unnatural and imprecise. While the student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'decreased', 'sharp growth', and 'downward trand', the heavy concentration of basic spelling and word choice errors impedes smooth reading, keeping the score at Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response shows a limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures frequently contain serious errors (e.g., 'the amount of jobs are measure in million', 'manyfactured having the highest amount', 'was having the sharp increased'). Punctuation and capitalization are problematic throughout, with missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and erratic spacing around commas. Grammatical errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.5 descriptor.
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