Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the change in number of jobs in four sectors of the US economy between 1960 till 2020. Healthcare sector has seen significant rise in six decade where as there is drop in Agriculture job sector.
Overall, It has witnessed that since 1960 till 2020 the healthcare sector become major concern of the citizens. From around 3 million jobs in the past to the stage of around 16 million jobs. It is the significant changed faced in this sector. It is mainly due to the rise of the population with the passage of the time.
Moreover, Retail Business also seen with significant growth in jobs in these time. Beside that Agriculture is the solely sector with sharp decline in jobs sector. It only remain half with passage of time. It can be due to the rise of education system as citizens donot want to do these jobs
In addition to this Manufacturing sector also faced fall but not high as compared to Agriculture.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the graph, such as the significant rise in healthcare and the decline in agriculture. However, the selection of data is somewhat imprecise and misses key points. For instance, the student states that retail business saw a significant growth in jobs 'in these time' without providing accurate figures, and mischaracterises the manufacturing sector's trend by stating it 'faced fall but not high as compared to Agriculture,' whereas manufacturing actually rose from 15 to 20 million before falling to 13 million. Furthermore, the inclusion of outside speculation regarding the reasons behind the trends (such as 'rise of the population' and 'rise of education system') is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. Band score: 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introduction is very short and contains awkward phrasing ('between 1960 till 2020'). Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Overall, It has witnessed that' and 'Beside that Agriculture is the solely sector'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear structure, leading to disjointed sentences that make it difficult to follow a clear line of thought. Referencing is also unclear in places. Band score: 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms such as 'rise', 'drop', 'growth', and 'fall'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'significant changed' instead of 'significant change', 'solely sector' instead of 'sole sector', and 'major concern of the citizens' instead of employment sector. These lexical inaccuracies and the restricted range of vocabulary constrain the quality of the writing and occasionally cause slight strain for the reader. Band score: 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures or passive voice ('It has witnessed that', 'Retail Business also seen with significant growth') are consistently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in six decade', 'in healthcare sector'), incorrect prepositions ('in these time'), and tense inconsistencies ('become major concern'). Punctuation and capitalization errors are also present (e.g., 'It has witnessed', 'donot'). These frequent errors frequently impede smooth reading. Band score: 4.5.
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