Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The line chart provides data about the amonut of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 to 2020.
Taking a general overview,the number of jobes in healthcare and retail saw a signnificant increase over the given time. Employment in manufacturing and agriculture experienced a downward trend.
It is clear, healthcare started as the samllest sectors in1960 with only about 1 million jobs.However,it grew rapidly and became the largest industry by 2020,reaching nearly 18 million jobs. The retail sector showed steday growth.It began at around 6 million jobs in 1960 and clibed consistently to finish at approximately 16 million jobs at the end of the period.
Moving further,manufacturing was the most popular sector in 1960 with15 million jobs.It peaked at 20 million in 1980but then dropped sharply to justr 12 million jobs in2020. Lastly,agriculture always had the lowest amount of workers.It started at about 4 million jobs in1960 and slowly decreased,remaining stable at around 2to3 million jobs the rest of the years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The student covers all parts of the task well, selecting and reporting the main features of the line graph while making clear comparisons. An overview is present in the second paragraph, highlighting the overall upward trends for healthcare and retail, and downward trends for manufacturing and agriculture. Key figures are accurately cited, such as manufacturing peaking at 20 million in 1980 and healthcare reaching nearly 18 million (visual shows 16 million, but within acceptable approximation range) by 2020. Minor inaccuracies in reading specific start and end points exist, such as stating agriculture started at about 4 million (visual shows 6 million), but these do not detract from the overall successful coverage of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs grouping the sectors logically (healthcare and retail together, manufacturing and agriculture together). Paragraphing is used appropriately. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as 'It is clear', 'The retail sector showed steady growth', 'Moving further', and 'Lastly'. However, referencing and transitions occasionally feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in structure, preventing it from reaching a higher band. Overall, the message is easy to follow from start to finish.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate to sufficient range of vocabulary suitable for an academic task, employing terms such as 'downward trend', 'grow rapidly', 'climb consistently', and 'drop sharply'. There are several spelling and typographical errors, such as 'amonut', 'signnificant', 'jobes', 'samllest', and 'steday'. Less common lexical items are attempted, but spelling inaccuracies and occasional awkward word choices (e.g., 'most popular sector' instead of 'largest sector') prevent a higher score, though these errors do not impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating control over past tense narrative structures (e.g., 'It began at around 6 million jobs in 1960 and climbed consistently'). There are frequent error-free sentences, but grammatical and mechanical errors are present, including punctuation spacing issues (e.g., 'overview,the', 'in1960', 'sector in1960', 'with15', 'in2020', 'around 2to3') and missing spaces. Complex structures are attempted with generally good control, but punctuation slips and minor mechanical errors keep this at a solid band 6.5.
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