Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Experience of jobs from 1960 to 2020. Every job has his own chance with a time. In 1960, Agriculture job was high but slowly that started decreasing because of getting no any benefit from it. Health care jobs increased highly till 2020 becuase of population increased so people needed health care. As population increased people wanted things directly and individul towards them and several people need jobs so retail jobs got chance to increase. It increased speedly. In last, Manufacturing jobs increased till 1980 unfortunately it started decreasing in 2000 due to Artificial Intelligence. Artificial Intelligence has replaced several jobs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 100 words. While the writer attempts to describe some features of the graph, such as the trends in agriculture, healthcare, and retail, the overview is missing, and the data is often imprecise or lacks specific figures. Furthermore, the explanation for manufacturing attributing the decline to Artificial Intelligence in the year 2000 brings in outside knowledge not reflected in standard economic trends for that exact period, and overall the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is written as a single block paragraph without proper paragraphing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'In last,' which leads to poor logical progression. Reference words are sometimes unclear, and the overall arrangement lacks clear structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., 'jobs', 'increased', 'popular'), with noticeable errors in word choice and collocation such as 'Agriculture job was high' and 'retail jobs got chance to increase'. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very basic points, but frequent unnatural phrasing impedes smooth reading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The writer relies on simple and basic sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'Every job has his own chance with a time', 'getting no any benefit from it', and 'becuase of population increased'. Punctuation and article use are also problematic throughout the response, causing some difficulty for the reader.
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