Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given line graph demonstrates the information about the economy in number of occupations of four different sectors[manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare] in US from 1960 to 2020.

overall, the amount of jobs in manufacturing and agriculture sector of US followed decreased trend. In contrast, work placement in retail and healthcare sector proposed more jobs at 2020.

It is evident that, in 1960, there was minimum job opportunities in medical line accounted for 2 millons. After that it climbed gradually and rached at exactly 5 millons in 1980. eventually it rose rapidly and provided 11 millions and approximetly 15 millons job in 2000 or 2020 respectively.Additionally, in retailing, it also offer lest jobs which was around 6 millions in 1960 then it was go up at 15 millions 2000. In 2020,it increased minorly anand stayed at just above the 15 millions.

Moreover, the manufacturing and agriculture sector offer minimum job at 2020. In1960 manufacturing sector provide maximum jobs to people, which was noted as 15 millons.Then it esclate at 20miilion. After that rise it plummet till at 2020 and accounted for 13 millons. furthermore, there was also decline in jobs at agriculture sector.where it proposed 6 millions work facilities. After fluctuation it fall at 4 millions. after stagation in 2000 it drop at 2 millions, whic was provide least jobs in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student covers all four sectors shown in the graph and attempts to report the main features and trends, such as the overall decline in manufacturing and agriculture, and the growth in retail and healthcare. An overview is provided, although it is split across the first two paragraphs. However, there are several inaccurate data points and misreadings compared to the visual data. For instance, agriculture in 1960 is reported as 6 million, but the chart shows it starting at around 6 million; however, by 2020 it is stated as 2 million, which is correct. Conversely, manufacturing in 1960 is correctly identified as 15 million, but its peak in 1980 is stated as 20 million (accurate) with a subsequent drop to 13 million in 2020 (also accurate). Some minor data inaccuracies persist, but the main trends are generally captured. This corresponds to a Band 5.5 performance, rounded to 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is divided into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs addressing the different sectors. Cohesive devices are attempted (e.g., 'In contrast', 'It is evident that', 'Additionally', 'Moreover'), but their use is frequently mechanical, repetitive, or inaccurate ('eventually it rose rapidly', 'increased minorly anand stayed'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors around transitions disrupt the flow. While there is a discernible organizational structure, the progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by clunky transitions and phrasing. This fits the Band 5 descriptors well.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range to communicate basic trends, using terms like 'sector', 'climbed gradually', 'rose rapidly', and 'fluctuation'. However, there are numerous word choice errors, awkward collocations, and spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'millons', 'approximetly', 'lest jobs', 'minorly', 'anand', 'esclate', 'plummet till at', 'stagation', 'whic'). Less common vocabulary is attempted but frequently inaccurate or misapplied. The lexical control is generally at a Band 5 level due to noticeable spelling and morphological errors that occasionally cause strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'demonstrates the information about', 'followed decreased trend', 'work placement... proposed', 'there was minimum job opportunities', 'it was go up'). Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent, with missing spaces after punctuation marks and lowercase letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'overall', 'In1960', 'where it proposed'). Because errors are frequent and recurrent across simple and complex forms, this warrants a Band 5 score.

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