Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This graph show the information about the numbers of jobs in different sector of the economy. Sectors include in the economy are manufacturing, retail, agriculture, and hgealthcare is the major sectors of the economy. As we can see the graph it will show that the vertical line show the number of jobs and hohorizontal line show the number of years.

In the graph vertical line show the number of job which is in million in 1960 the number of jobs is almost zero but in 2020 it will be increase by 25 million the messive change is here. The horizontal line show the number of year which is 1960 to 2020 in addition, in this graph there is different sector of economy as we can see imn the graph the manufacturing sector jobs in 1960 is 15 million and it will increase in 1980 after that is will decrease.Another sectors is alos shown in the figure as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the provided graph on jobs in the US, but the coverage of the main features is very limited and poorly structured. The writer mentions the manufacturing sector with some specific figures (e.g., 15 million in 1960), but misinterprets data or speaks vaguely about others, such as stating that jobs in 1960 were 'almost zero' or increasing to 25 million by 2020. The overview describes the mechanics of the graph itself rather than summarizing the main economic trends as required by Task 1. Important sectors like healthcare and retail are barely addressed. This level of execution aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, as it is written as a single, dense block of text, except for an accidental line break. Cohesive devices are either missing, mechanical, or repetitive (e.g., excessive use of 'as we can see the graph' and run-on sentences connected by commas). There is no clear logical progression or structuring of data comparing the four sectors. Sentences often bleed into one another without proper punctuation or transitions, making the information difficult to follow. This reflects a Band 4.0 performance.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words such as 'number', 'jobs', 'economy', and 'sector' are repeated constantly without synonyms or paraphrasing. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, including 'hgealthcare', 'hohorizontal', 'messive', and 'imn'. The lexical range is extremely limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, hindering clear communication in several places. This matches the criteria for Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple clauses strung together with commas or conjunctions rather than complex sentence structures. There are persistent, severe grammatical errors throughout the response, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('This graph show', 'vertical line show'), tense confusion ('it will be increase', 'is will decrease'), and sentence fragments. These frequent errors cause considerable strain for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band score, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptor.

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