Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph presents data on jobs in four sectors of the economy across in the America 1960 and 2020.It is designed to show how the figures changed over time.
overall healthcare occupation in 1960 followed a clear up ward part while Agriculture jobs Moved in the opposite direction.The most strinking features is downward. other hand Retail jobs in starting point has a no demand but after a couple of yeaars in us retail jobs increase.
And Manufacturing is demanding job in the us there are 15 millions jobs there in 1960 However in 2020 Manufacturing jobs slightly downward.
In detail healthcare job started at 2 in 1960 and rise to15 or 16 million in 2020. Agriculture Postion remained faierly flat at first then dropped sharply after year 2020.
Meanwhile Retail jobs peaked around 1960 before ending higher at 2020.Manufacturing occupation , by comaprison, showed only minor fluctuations throuhout bettween 1960 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting trends for healthcare, agriculture, retail, and manufacturing. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that agriculture 'dropped sharply after year 2020,' whereas the graph shows it declining from 1960 to 2020. Similarly, retail jobs are described as 'peaked around 1960' when the graph actually shows retail starting low at 6 million in 1960 and rising to 16 million in 2020. Furthermore, the overview is disjointed and contains confusing phrasing. While some key trends are identified, the misinterpretation of data and lack of a coherent summary limit the task achievement to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the paragraphs are fragmented and some sentences appear disjointed or out of place. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'The most strinking features is downward. other hand Retail jobs...', which disrupts the flow of reading. Reference pronouns and linking phrases are frequently misused or omitted, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Overall, the structural arrangement and mechanical use of cohesion correspond to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice, form, and spelling. Examples include 'up ward part', 'strinking', 'yeaars', and 'occupation' used incorrectly for economic sectors. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'fluctuations', but misuse of terms like 'demanding job' and inaccurate data terminology restrict the lexical range. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There is a very limited range of grammatical structures used successfully. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures often result in faulty grammar, missing verbs, or incorrect prepositions, such as 'jobs in four sectors of the economy across in the America 1960 and 2020' and 'Manufacturing occupation , by comaprison, showed only minor fluctuations throuhout bettween 1960 to 2020.' Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization, are frequent. These persistent errors hinder readability, earning a Band 5.0.
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