Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Line graph illustrate the clear information about the comparisons between number of jobs in four major sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Overall, the graph represent the total numbers of jobs in the four major scetors (Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture and Healthcare). In healthcare and retails sectors we can see significant increase with the passage of time but in agriculter sector we see consistent jobs decrese.In manufacturing sector we can see clear flucation in start its shows rapid growth but after 1980 steady dropped in Jobs.
Manufacturing sectors is a highlighted category with 15 millions jobs that rapid grew in start from 1960 to 1980 but after 1980 its show the consist decress in the the jobs. In contrast healthcare sectore shows significant growth with the passage of time each year the growth graph move upward with stable growth.
In 1960, where retail sector graph shows raid raised but agriculture sectors decreased in the jobs but after 1980 we do not see any growth in the jobs so they remain consistent and after 2000 we also see decrease in agriculture sector.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all four sectors (Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture, and Healthcare) and attempts to report main features and comparisons. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that the retail sector showed a 'rapid raised' in 1960, whereas the graph indicates it started at a low of 6 million and grew steadily. Furthermore, the overview mentions general trends, but the lack of precise handling of the timeline and data points (such as misinterpreting the agricultural trend after 2000) prevents it from achieving a higher band. It satisfies the basic requirements of summarising visual data, earning a Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a discernible overall structure, including an introduction and body paragraphs attempting to group information by sector. However, the progression is sometimes difficult to follow due to mechanical and inadequate cohesive devices (e.g., repeating 'In ... sector we can see'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks logical flow, and referencing is occasionally unclear ('so they remain consistent'). This places the performance firmly in Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive ('clear information', 'significant increase', 'rapid growth'). There are several spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, such as 'flucation' for fluctuation, 'agriculter' for agriculture, 'decress' for decrease, and 'sectore' for sector. These errors and the limited range of less common lexical items mean the vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many contain noticeable grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The Line graph illustrate', 'Manufacturing sectors is a highlighted category'), missing articles ('in start', 'in jobs'), and awkward phrasing ('each year the growth graph move upward'). Punctuation is also erratic in places (run-on sentences without proper conjunctions or full stops). These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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