Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates comparison about number of vacancies in four departments of the economy in th United states over a period of sixty year.
The workfore presented in millions.
Overall, the graph highlights the manufcturing industry and agriculture continously were declining, while both healthcare and retail were substanial growing between 1960 to 2020.
To commence with, initially in 1960, manufacturing sector was provided 15 millions of jobs then in next twenty years it slightly rose up to 20 millions afterthat, it continously decline till 2020. the agriculture department statrted at five million jobs in 1960 later on it decline and remain same for 40 years then in next 20 years it slightly down.
on the other hand, Healtcare and retails sectors significantly inreases and leveled off in 2020. in 1960 healtcare satred with about 2 millions and retail begin with 5 millions in 1980 to 2020 there were increases double in number.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the prompt by identifying the four sectors and summarising their trends between 1960 and 2020. However, the overview lacks precision ('manufcturing industry and agriculture continously were declining'), as agriculture actually started at 6 million, dropped, and remained flat for a long period rather than continuously declining in the same manner as manufacturing. Furthermore, some data points are inaccurate or poorly expressed, such as claiming the agriculture department started at five million jobs when the chart indicates 6 million. The response meets the minimum word count, but the lack of accurate reporting and a fully cohesive overview limits the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into rudimentary paragraphs, but the overall structure and cohesion are weak. The introduction is split into two disjointed sentences, and the main body paragraphs lack clear progression and logical connector usage. The student uses basic transitional phrases like 'To commence with' and 'on the other hand', but referencing and linking within sentences are frequently faulty (e.g., 'afterthat, it continously decline till 2020. the agriculture department...'). Paragraphing is barely adequate to separate the introduction, overview, and body details, resulting in a Band 5.0 performance.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring numerous spelling and word-choice errors that detract from the response. Examples include 'workfore' for workforce, 'manufcturing' for manufacturing, 'substanial growing' for substantially growing, 'statrted' for started, and 'Healtcare' for healthcare. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'departments' and 'significantly', the high frequency of lexical slips and incorrect word forms ('retail begin', 'increases double in number') restricts the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are multiple tense inconsistencies and missing auxiliary verbs, such as 'manufacturing sector was provided 15 millions of jobs' and 'Healtcare and retails sectors significantly inreases'. Punctuation is also poorly handled, with run-on clauses and missing capitalisation at the start of sentences (e.g., 'the agriculture department', 'on the other hand'). Because errors occur frequently and occasionally impede smooth reading, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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