Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the details about the four sectors of the economy in the US from year 1960 to 2020.As the graph depicts different sectors like manufacturing,retail,agriculture and healthcare and their jobs in millions.
In the year of 1960 to 1980,the manufacturing sector was increasing like 15 million to 20 million but in last 2 years it started decereasing eventually from 16 million to 13 million.The retail sector started increasing from 1960 to 2020. It never stoped rising.On the other hand, the agriculture sector always deacreasing from 5 million to 2 million.Interestingly, the healthcare sector never stoped as it was rising year by year from 2 million to 15.5 ,million. At last, the camparison we can make here about the retail and healthcare sector as these both are ending up on last same point of 15.5 million.
in conclusion, The not even a single sector was on its peak between these years. as the sector were rising and two were olny decereasing year by year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the main features of the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that manufacturing started decreasing in the 'last 2 years' from 16 million to 13 million, whereas the graph shows it peaked in 1980 at 20 million before declining to 17 million in 2000 and 13 million in 2020. Similarly, the agriculture sector is said to have gone from 5 million to 2 million, while the visual data shows it started at 6 million in 1960. While an overview is attempted in the conclusion, the overall response lacks precise data selection and clear summarisation of trends, placing it firmly at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, a body paragraph, and a conclusion, showing some basic organisation. However, paragraphing and mechanical layout are poorly handled, with spacing issues and a lack of clear separation between ideas. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes awkward, such as 'On the other hand', 'Interestingly', and 'At last'. Progression is difficult to follow because sentences are clustered together without logical transitional flow, and the referencing of data points is frequently confused. For these reasons, the coherence and cohesion reflect a Band 5.0 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying on terms like 'increasing', 'decreasing', and 'rising' throughout the text. There are several vocabulary errors and misspellings, such as 'decereasing', 'deacreasing', 'stoped' (stopped), and 'camparison'. The student attempts less common expressions like 'year by year', but overall control of word choice and collocation is limited. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of jobs in economic sectors, spelling and word-formation errors pull the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions. There are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g., '1960 to 1980,the', 'conclusion, The'). Furthermore, awkward phrasings like 'The not even a single sector was on its peak' demonstrate a lack of control over complex forms. Errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, matching the criteria for a Band 5.0.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.