Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph demonstrate the data of employees working into four different sector within a four year of US economy.
Among all four areas the agriculture and health sector starts with mutual numbers of jobs which is 6 million where retails progressively increase and leading the highest number of jobs i. e:around 16 million on the contrast agriculture sector shows drop in 1980 before showing steady number of jobs 2020 which is arround 2 million and become the least number of jobs among all four.
Manufacturing sector stands on top of among all four sectors regarding number of jobs with 15 million following a increase around leading its number of jobs to 20 million in 1980 but a major decline san be seen and leading to below 15 million number of occupation in 2020,on the other hand the health care sector intiated with least no of jobs that is 2-3 million but shows increasing number of jobs through oit the years and a rise to 16 million number of jibs standing along with retails till 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main trends in the four sectors over the 60-year period, but there are several inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'agriculture and health sector starts with mutual numbers of jobs which is 6 million,' whereas the chart shows healthcare starting at around 2 million and agriculture at 6 million in 1960. Additionally, the overview is weak, lacking a clear summary of the overall trends. While some key comparisons are made—such as healthcare and retail ending up at 16 million—the misinterpretation of starting points and figures pulls the score down into the Band 5.0 range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is arranged into paragraphs, but the overall progression is disrupted by poor punctuation and a lack of clear cohesive links. Sentences tend to run together without proper full stops or conjunctions, as seen in '...steady number of jobs 2020 which is arround 2 million and become the least number of jobs among all four.' Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of sentences makes the logical flow halting and mechanical. Referencing between ideas is sometimes unclear, placing the performance firmly in the Band 5.0 category.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'demonstrate' instead of 'demonstrates', 'sector' instead of 'sectors', 'arround' instead of 'around', 'intiated' instead of 'initiated', and 'throug oit' instead of 'throughout'. The student attempts less common phrases like 'progressively increase' and 'major decline', but these are often marred by grammatical awkwardness or inaccurate collocation. The range is minimally adequate for the task, matching the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a lack of basic punctuation, leading to long, run-on sentences that combine multiple clauses without proper subordination or coordination (e.g., 'Manufacturing sector stands on top of among all four sectors regarding number of jobs with 15 million following a increase around leading its number of jobs to 20 million in 1980 but a major decline san be seen...'). Simple structures are often faulty, and attempts at complex structures result in frequent errors that occasionally hinder comprehension, warranting a Band 4.5 score, which rounds to 5.0 in standard reporting, though strictly speaking represents significant grammatical strain.
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