Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the USA.[redacted phone].There are 4 types of jobs in economy,1- Manufacturing 2-retail 3- Agriclture 4-healthcare.In this graph tells uus that in 1960,The percentage of healthcare waqs .2.5%,The percentage of retails was 6%,The agriculture was 6% and manufacturing was 15% in 1960.After it in 1980 agirculture came down to 3%,The healthcare want up to 5%,retail want up to 10% and manufacturing give a big jump to 20% in 1980.In 2000

healthcare gives a big jump upto 11%,agirculture came don to 2.9% and manufacturning also came down !7% in 2000.if we are gonna talk about 2020 we can see lose and profit and those years,if we see healthcare comes upto 16%,agirculture goes down 2%,retails goes upto 16% and manufacturning came down to 13% in 2020.So this tells about the things of markets thats gpes up and down in those years in the USA.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, reporting data points across the four sectors (Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture, and Healthcare) for the years 1960, 1980, 2000, and 2020. However, the interpretation contains significant inaccuracies in data reporting (e.g., stating healthcare was '2.5%' in 1960 when the graph measures millions, and misquoting various year figures like 2.9% for agriculture in 2000). Furthermore, there is no proper overview provided, which is a key requirement for Task 1, instead concluding with a simplistic personal summary ('So this tells about the things of markets thats gpes up and down'). The information is also presented in a dense, unorganized block rather than structured paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a clear logical organization and progression throughout. There is a complete absence of proper paragraphing, with the entire text presented as a single, continuous block of sentences. Cohesive devices are basic, repetitive, and misused (e.g., 'After it', 'if we are gonna talk about'), making the flow mechanical and difficult to follow. Referencing is unclear at times, and the overall structure fails to guide the reader through the data in a coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on informal phrases such as 'gonna talk about' and 'lose and profit'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text (e.g., 'Agriclture', 'waqs', 'retails', 'agirculture', 'manufacturning'). The writer attempts less common vocabulary such as 'percentage' and 'sectors', but these are often applied incorrectly or marred by persistent mechanical errors. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate to fulfill the requirements of the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and awkwardly structured sentences. There is a high frequency of grammatical errors, including punctuation issues (missing spaces after periods, comma splices like 'economy,1- Manufacturing'), incorrect verb tenses, and preposition errors (e.g., 'comes upto', 'goes down 2%'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are faulty ('if we are gonna talk about 2020 we can see lose and profit and those years'). These frequent errors consistently impede fluency and communication.

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