Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line gap iliustrates the number of jobs in the economy sectors in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Overall, Healtcare sector has increse record for jobs by 2020 reaching upto 16 million. Whereas, Manufacturing sector invested jobs with highest of 15 milliion and dropped by 2020, Retail sector has gradually changes with rising of 16 million in 2020. While, Agriculture had steadily changes decreased by 2 million in 2020.
In 1960, Manufacturing invested highest employment with 15 million, reaching upto 20 million in 1980 and gradually droped below healthcare at 13 million in 2020. The investment in Healtcare sector was at the lowest of 3 million in 1960, rising upto to 5 million inn1980 and drasticly increased upto 16 million in 2020.
In 1960, Retail job sector invested 5 million, the growth reached upto 16 million crossing Manufactruing in 2020.
However, Agriculture jobs with 5 million employemt remaind steady in 1980 at 3 million and decrease by 2 million in 2020.
Therefore, Healthcare played an incresed role in job sector and manufacturing droped
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the four sectors between 1960 and 2020 and makes appropriate comparisons. An overview is provided, although it is placed in the second paragraph rather than an introductory summary, and some of the terminology used is slightly unnatural (e.g. 'invested jobs'). The figures reported generally align with the visual data, such as Healthcare reaching 16 million and Agriculture dropping to 2 million. However, some minor inaccuracies in data reporting occur, such as stating Healthcare started at 3 million when it was closer to 2 million. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 well, but could be improved with greater precision in lexical choice and data reporting. This performance aligns with a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into clear paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to specific sectors and trends. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'Whereas', 'While', and 'However'. However, some referencing and logical flow are occasionally faulty or mechanical, and the concluding sentence ('Therefore, Healthcare played an incresed role...') acts as a fragment rather than a well-integrated summary. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate, but the overall progression could be smoother. This warrants a Band 6.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts a range of vocabulary relevant to the task, including words like 'sector', 'employment', 'gradually', and 'drasticly'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and odd collocations, such as 'line gap' instead of 'line graph', 'invested jobs', and spelling errors like 'Healtcare', 'increse', 'milliion', 'droped', 'inn1980', and 'incresed'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey the general message, these errors and frequent misspellings prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Therefore, a Band 5.5 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, attempting various clauses and time markers. However, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing (e.g. 'Agriculture had steadily changes decreased', 'job sector and manufacturing droped'). Punctuation and article usage also show frequent slips. Although these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent enough to cap the score at Band 5.0.
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