Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line chart compares thr proportion of employment in between four sector ,which is the economy in the US during the year from 1960 to 2020.
After analysis ,it is clear that Manufacturing field showed the highest ratio,whereas agriculture experienced the lowest trend.Moreover all sector interseact each others throughout the year.
Firstly,in 1960 agriculture achive roughly 6 million job.Afterwards it experienced a minimal declined from 1980 to 2020 to reach at around 4 to 3 millions job.Subsequently,healthcare accounted for only 2 millions job in 1960,rose to 5 millions in 1980 and then increased significantly to10%more in 2020.
Secondly,in the starting year manufacturing ratio was 15 million ,following this it surged to 20 millionsin 1980.from 1980 to 2020 it experienced a slight decline to nearlly 17 to14% and also crossing with the figure of retal sector and agriculture in the end year.Beside this retail showed a steady upward trend after 1960 at around 6 millions to 16 millions. .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, reporting data for all four sectors between 1960 and 2020. However, there are several inaccurate data interpretations and misreadings of the graph. For instance, the student states that agriculture achieved 'roughly 6 million job' in 1960 and reached 'around 4 to 3 millions', whereas the chart shows it started at 6 million and dropped to 2 million. Additionally, referencing '10% more' for healthcare is an incorrect use of units, as the chart measures jobs in millions. There is an overview provided at the beginning, but some trends are under-developed or inaccurately described. This places the task achievement at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor punctuation, missing spaces after commas and periods, and awkward transitions such as 'Firstly,in 1960' and 'Secondly,in the starting year'. Cohesive devices are attempted, but referencing and substitution are weak, notably with phrases like 'all sector interseact each others'. Paragraphing is present, but the overall mechanical execution of cohesion disrupts smooth readability, aligning best with a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts to use sector-specific vocabulary such as 'Manufacturing field', 'agriculture', 'healthcare', and 'retail sector'. However, lexical control is quite limited, and there are numerous word choice and form errors, such as 'thr proportion', 'interseact each others', 'achive roughly', and 'declined' instead of 'decline'. The incorrect use of percentages ('10%more') further demonstrates vocabulary and data reporting limitations. The vocabulary range is minimally adequate for the task, but errors in word formation and spelling are noticeable, warranting a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are frequent punctuation and spacing errors (e.g., missing spaces after commas, run-on phrases like '1980in 1980.from'). Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency issues are also present, such as 'agriculture achive' and 'all sector interseact'. Errors frequently cause some difficulty for the reader and impede fluent comprehension, representing the characteristics of a Band 5.0 script.
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