Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The chart gives the detailsabout list of jobs in 4 catagories of economy in United state that accurs during 1960 to 2020.

By looking at the information given in the graph,there is sharp increase in amount of jobs in medical department.from 1960 to 2020.while agri department shows almost same availablity ,but we see sharp decline in the field of manufacturing and retails shops.

So overall the best going offer is from 3 departments that reaches its peak but the least one that almost not available in these days are only in crops field.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 93 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While the student attempts to outline main trends, such as the increase in jobs in the medical sector and the decline in manufacturing, the information is overly brief and misses several key comparisons and data points from the chart. Furthermore, there are inaccurate generalisations, such as claiming that the agricultural sector shows 'almost same availability' when the graph clearly shows a steady downward trend from 6 million to 2 million jobs. Due to the severe under-length and incomplete coverage of the data, the score is limited to Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks standard paragraphing, consisting only of a short introductory sentence followed by two brief, poorly structured blocks. Cohesion is weak and mechanical, relying on basic connectors like 'By looking at the information given in the graph' and 'So overall'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by abrupt transitions and disjointed sentences. Referencing is also unclear in places, such as the concluding sentence which is confusingly phrased and fails to effectively summarise the key trends. Overall, the structural organisation falls short of Band 5 expectations.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is very basic and limited, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'catagories', 'accurse', 'availablity', and 'retails shops'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'medical department' and 'manufacturing', but the overall lexical range is inadequate for a higher band. Repetition is noticeable, and terms are sometimes used inaccurately, such as 'best going offer' and 'crops field'. These errors restrict the vocabulary score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are marred by frequent structural errors and poor punctuation. Examples include missing articles ('in United state'), run-on clauses ('in the graph,there is'), and incorrect verb forms ('accurs', 'reaches its peak'). Punctuation and spacing errors are widespread throughout the text. Because errors occur frequently and occasionally impede smooth readability, the performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.

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