Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Information about the amount of jods in fout sector in four sectors of the economy in US between 1960 and 2020 is illusrated by the provided line graph
overall, the line shows the data of amount of jobs in four sector of US economy, which are manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare. The healthcare and retail sector were at different number in 1960, but ended up in similar numder of jobs in 2020, and also the both sectors demonstrates an upward trend. But the agriculture sector display an downwards trend thoughout the years, where the manufacturing slightly went up, but show an decline in trend
Digging deeper into the obtainable information, the retail and healthcare sector were started differently, where retail at 6 million and healthcare being at 3 million in 1960, which ended up on similiar number of jobs in 2020 which is 16 million. this bothe sector retail and healthcare dipalys an upwards trends throughout the years
Futhermore, the manufacturing sector started at 15 million in 1960, but graudaaly went down to 8 million, the manufacturing sector peaked at 20 million in 1980, after that shown decline till 2020. so the agriculture sector depicts downwards trend throghout the years staryed at 6 million in 1960, and went down to 3 miliion 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to report the main features of the line graph, identifying trends across the four economic sectors. An overview is provided, noting the overall upward trends in healthcare and retail and the downward trend in agriculture. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reading the data from the chart. For example, the student states that manufacturing 'graudaaly went down to 8 million', whereas the chart shows it dropping to 13 million in 2020. Similarly, the starting point for healthcare is misread as 3 million (it starts around 2 million), and agriculture is incorrectly stated as ending at 3 million in 2020 instead of 2 million. While the general trends are captured, these data errors pull the response down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group the sectors. However, the progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and numerous mechanical linking issues, such as 'overall, the line shows... but the agriculture sector display an downwards trend...' Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively ('Digging deeper into the obtainable information', 'Futhermore'). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty, placing the response firmly in Band 5.0 according to the descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'jods', 'fout', 'illusrated', 'numder', 'dipalys', 'graudaaly', 'staryed', and 'miliion'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'obtainable information' and 'downwards trend', but the high density of typographical and lexical errors ('both sector retail and healthcare dipalys') impedes readability and obscures meaning at times, fitting the Band 5.0 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency (e.g., 'the retail and healthcare sector were started differently', 'the agriculture sector display an downwards trend', 'the manufacturing sector peaked at 20 million in 1980, after that shown decline'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capitalisation at the start of sentences and absent full stops. These recurring errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 5.0.
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