Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the number of jobs in four different sectors of the economy namily, manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare, in the US from 1960 to 2020, measure jobs in millions.
Overall, it is clear that retail and healthcare sectors recorded the highest jobs over the perids, whereas agriculture shows opposities fall direction and it become least perfirence foe jobs in US. In addication, healthcare show both rise and drop patten from 1960 to 2020.
To the beginning with retail and agriculture jobs, in 1960 stood at 5 million. The retail jobs increased gragualy to 15 million in 2000 but at the end of the years reach around 16 million. while an agriculture it show oppositive decrised trend at 3 million in 1980 and 2000, afther that slight drop in 2020.
Turning to other remaining categouries healthcare was at 3 million in 1960. it increased sharply at 16 million in 2020. Manufacturing started 15 million in 1960 then it rose at 20 in 1980, afther that it jump down at 11 million in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting on the four sectors from 1960 to 2020. An overview is provided, noting the general trends for retail, healthcare, and agriculture. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that retail and agriculture jobs in 1960 stood at 5 million, whereas the graph indicates 6 million for retail and 6 million for agriculture individually, creating confusion by grouping them. Furthermore, manufacturing in 1980 reached 20 million, but the student misquotes some figures or makes vague references. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision in data reporting keeps this response at a Band 5.5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into logical paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the categories. However, the progression within paragraphs is often disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures, such as 'To the beginning with retail and agriculture jobs, in 1960 stood at 5 million.' Cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'Overall', 'In addication', and 'Turning to other remaining categouries', but spelling errors and mechanical usage weaken the overall flow. Paragraphing is present, but referencing is sometimes unclear, which hampers readability. This performance aligns best with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary relevant to the prompt, including terms like 'manufacturing', 'retail', 'agriculture', and 'healthcare'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('namily', 'perids', 'opposities', 'perifrence', 'addication', 'patten', 'gragualy', 'afther', 'categouries') and poor word choices ('jump down' instead of 'plummeted' or 'declined'). The lack of precision and recurrent lexical errors severely restrict the vocabulary score, positioning it firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak throughout. There are numerous errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'healthcare show both rise and drop patten' and 'while an agriculture it show oppositive decrised trend'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing capitalization or periods in places. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause confusion for the reader, this warrants a Band 5.0 score.
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