Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph underneath exhibit detail about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

In the summary, the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US are the the lowest line in graph are agriculture is ninteen to twenty century. And the manufacturing are highest in graph but they are maximum twenty jobs in millions is ninteen to twenty century.

In the explanation, the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US , [redacted phone] are the lowest is agriculture are 5 below to 5 jobs in millions of year are 1960 to 2020. and the health care are the maximum 5 up to15 jobs in million of year 1960 to 2020 . the retail of enconomy in the US are 2.5 upper to maximum 15 job in million of year 1960 to 2020. And the last sectors are manufacturing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing information from the graph regarding the four sectors in the US between 1960 and 2020. However, the selection and reporting of main features is extremely confused and lacks clarity. The writer states that agriculture is the 'lowest line' and mentions figures such as '5 below to 5 jobs in millions', but the information is disjointed, incomplete, and abruptly cuts off at the end ('And the last sectors are manufacturing'). While an overview is attempted, the overall response lacks a coherent summary of the main trends and fails to make appropriate, clear comparisons across the period, falling well within Band 4 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the text is very weak, preventing clear progression throughout the response. The text is divided into mechanical sections ('In the summary', 'In the explanation') rather than a natural report structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive phrasings such as 'the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US' appearing multiple times. Furthermore, paragraphing is poor, and the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, which severely disrupts the logical flow and overall readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, highly repetitive, and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'lowest line in graph', 'maximum twenty jobs in millions', and '5 below to 5 jobs in millions' demonstrate a very limited range of lexical items and poor control over topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and data. Word choices are frequently awkward or incorrect, causing strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical structures are extremely limited, and control over basic sentence construction is weak. The text contains frequent, severe errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of jobs... are', 'the manufacturing are highest'), incorrect prepositions, and incomplete sentences ('And the last sectors are manufacturing'). Complex structures are not used accurately, and basic punctuation and capitalization are erratic. These persistent errors frequently impede communication.

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