Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows the employers change in the U.S four sectors between 1960 to 2020.
Overall, manufacturing and agriculture sectors shown the down trajectory, on the other hand, the healthcare and retail sector shows the prominent upstream trend.
As we see that manufacturing sector starts from 15 million in 1960 and then goes up to 20 million in 1980, after that it start streadily making down strent from year 1980 to 2020 and goes down just down after its start point. Thereafter, the agriculture sector jobs starting from 6 million jobs in 1960 and afterthat, it decreased between 1980 to 2020 it decreased up to 3 million.
Retail Sector starts from 6 million also and just shows the big change in 1980 the job goes up to 10 millions and hit upto 16 million in 2020. Healthcare is the very major sector that starts from low about 3 millions and it shows prominent change from the year of 1960 to 2020 joint the point of retail jobs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student covers all four economic sectors and attempts to report main trends and comparisons, which satisfies the basic requirements of Task 1. However, the selection of data is sometimes inaccurate or poorly supported; for instance, the description of agriculture missing key nuances or the phrasing 'goes down just down after its start point' for manufacturing lacks precision. The overview sentence attempts to contrast the downward trends of manufacturing and agriculture with the upward trends of healthcare and retail, but the language is awkward. While the general picture is captured, data points are occasionally imprecise, placing this response in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts to use organizational markers such as 'Overall,' 'As we see that,' and 'Thereafter,' but paragraphing is weak, with the entire body crammed into a single block of text alongside the introduction. Cohesive devices are often mechanical, repetitive, or grammatically awkward (e.g., 'afterthat, it decreased between 1980 to 2020 it decreased up to 3 million'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression between sentences is disrupted by run-on structures and punctuation issues. Overall arrangement shows some basic progression, but paragraphing and cohesion are faulty, warranting a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations. Examples include 'employers change' instead of employment changes, 'down trajectory,' 'upstream trend,' and 'making down strent.' The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to trends, but these attempts are mostly inaccurate. Spelling and word formation issues also occur ('streadily,' 'strent'). The lexical range is minimally adequate for conveying basic trends, but the numerous inaccuracies place it firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on basic, repetitive sentence patterns that are often incorrectly put together. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause linking, such as in 'manufacturing sector starts from 15 million in 1960 and then goes up... after that it start streadily making down strent.' Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to frequent errors that require the reader to slow down to understand the intended meaning. This performance aligns with Band 4.5 or 5.0; given the persistence of basic errors, Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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