Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given graph ilustrates information about number of jobs in the four sectors of the economy over the period from 1960 to 2020.
Overall it is evident that Healthcare sector experienced the substantial growth, whereas manufacturing and agricultural sectors facing a decrease in the number of jobs over the period.
Looking at the figure in greater detail, the number of jobs in healthcare industry increased from half million in 1960 to more than 15 million in 2020. Similarly, retail sector experienced a increase in jobs from 5 million to 15 million in 2000 and then showing a minimum increase till the end of period.
Turning to Agriculture sector, the line depicts overall decrease in the number of jobs from 5 million to half of million in 2020. Lastly, the manufacture industry experienced rising of number of jobs from 15 million to 20 million in 1980 and then showing a continuous downfall decreasing the number of jobs to less than 15 million over the period of time till 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons across the four economic sectors. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the overall trajectory of healthcare, manufacturing, and agriculture. Key data points are generally accurate, such as noting that manufacturing peaked in 1980 at 20 million and that retail and healthcare both reached around 15 to 16 million by 2020. However, there are minor inaccuracies in starting and ending figures, such as stating healthcare started at 'half million' when the chart shows 2 million, and agriculture ending at 'half of million' instead of 2 million. Despite these minor discrepancies, the response adequately covers the key visual data and fulfills the requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response is organized into a logical four-paragraph structure comprising an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific sectors. Ideas flow reasonably well with clear signposting language such as 'Looking at the figure in greater detail' and 'Turning to Agriculture sector'. However, cohesive devices and referencing are sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, as seen in the phrase 'then showing a minimum increase till the end of period'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the detailed body paragraphs, contributing to a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully employing terms related to trends such as 'substantial growth', 'decrease', and 'downfall'. There are, however, some lexical and collocation errors, such as 'ilustrates' (spelling slip), 'manufacturing and agricultural sectors facing a decrease' (grammatical mismatch in the participle clause), and 'rising of number of jobs'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main features, but more precise word choice and accurate collocation would elevate the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and participial phrases like 'whereas manufacturing and agricultural sectors facing a decrease'. Control over grammar is generally acceptable, though minor errors persist, such as missing articles ('the given graph ilustrates information about number of jobs', 'retail sector experienced a increase') and awkward participle structures. Punctuation is mostly accurate, and although errors occur, they rarely impede communication, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptor.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.