Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The information in the table represents that information about the number of the jobs in four sectins of the economy in us bwtween 1960 and 2020 there are many jobs avaiable for millions of peoples in the society in 1960 there was million of jobs avaiable for manufacturing and retail agriculture and health care in 1960 there was many jobs of manufacturing feild the highest job ratio is manufacturing which is about 15 percent in its ratio the second one is the retailing job which is about 5 percent in its ratio third one is the agriculture field that is very famous the last one is the healthcare unit which has very low ratio in 1960 and the year 2000 these jobs have the millions of peoples to do such kind of jobs in our country and the other foreign countries most of the peoples prefet to do such kind of job because these are high salaries jobs in countries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by discussing the provided graph on US jobs from 1960 to 2020. However, the performance falls short of the higher band criteria. The writing lacks an overall overview of main trends and misinterprets the data significantly, such as stating that manufacturing was 'about 15 percent in its ratio' and asserting that other sectors had a 'very low ratio' in 1960 and 2000. Data points are frequently inaccurate or vague, and the response drifts into irrelevant generalisations about countries and salaries at the end. It only minimally covers the required information, earning a Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe structural and cohesive issues. There is no paragraphing whatsoever, as the entire response is presented as a single, continuous, unbroken block of text. Furthermore, there is a total lack of punctuation, including periods, commas, or capitalisation at sentence boundaries, making it resemble a massive run-on sentence. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, and referencing between ideas is unclear. Progression is difficult to discern due to the absence of standard text organisation, placing this response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently repeats words such as 'jobs', 'ratio', and 'field' without demonstrating flexibility or a wider lexical resource. There are also numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'sectins' instead of sections, 'avaiable' instead of available, 'peoples' instead of people, 'feild' instead of field, and 'prefet' instead of prefer. These noticeable lexical errors and the limited range of terminology restrict the score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response consists of a continuous stream of clauses strung together without any terminal punctuation or correct sentence demarcation. There are frequent errors in basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and word forms (e.g., 'high salaries jobs' instead of high-salary jobs). Complex structures are completely absent, and simple sentences are rendered faulty through punctuation omissions. Because the frequency of basic grammatical errors constantly impedes understanding, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

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