Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph below present information about the number of jobs in four sctors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
overall, the graph below shows the number of jobs in four sector of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.Here we can notice that healthcare has been reached a peak without missing its flow from 3 million in 1960 to 16 million in 2020, how ever the manufacturing sector of economy has decreased sharply from the stage in 1980 which jobs holds up to 20 million and dropped to 12 million in 2020.
Initially, by comparing the information provided in the graph agriculture include the lowest number of jobs in 2020,its number of jobs in 1960 is 6 million and it decrease to 4 million in 1980 and 2000 in 2020 its jobs has decreased to 3 million. Health care has increased gradually from 2 million in 1960,5 million in 1980, 11 million in 2000 and 16 million in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all four sectors shown in the graph and attempts to make comparisons over the 1960–2020 period. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that agriculture was 6 million in 1960, decreased to 4 million in 1980 and 2000, and 3 million in 2020, whereas the graph indicates it was 6 million in 1960 and declined steadily to around 2 million by 2020. Additionally, the overview is repetitive, restating the prompt twice rather than highlighting the main global trends, such as the dramatic rise of healthcare versus the decline in agriculture. The selection of data lacks precision, placing the response in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into three paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph, but the paragraphing is poorly handled. The overview is merged into the second paragraph along with specific data points, and the overall progression lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'how ever' and 'Initially, by comparing...'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical repetition of the task prompt across the opening sentences ('The given graph below present information...' and 'overall, the graph below shows...') disrupts the flow of ideas. This corresponds to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors ('sctors', 'how ever') and awkward word choices ('without missing its flow', 'jobs holds up'). While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to economic trends, such as 'decreased sharply' and 'increased gradually', the lexical control is weak. Words like 'sector of economy' lack necessary articles or prepositions. The range is minimally adequate for the task, but lexical errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing it at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are often faulty and poorly punctuated, such as run-on sentences ('Here we can notice that healthcare has been reached a peak without missing its flow...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the graph... present', 'agriculture include'), incorrect passive/active voice combinations ('has been reached'), and tense inconsistencies. These errors frequently impede smooth reading, supporting a Band 5.0 score.
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