Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph depicts the total count of jobs in different fields of the economy from 1960 to 2020 in US.
Overall. it si clear that due to advancement in technology the retail sector grows very well as compared to others.
Having a myopic glance it can be seen that in 1960 almost 2 millions jobs were available for public in healtcare and slightly rose up by 3 millions in 1980 but after two decades the number sharply incremented by 11 millions in 2020. Moreover, in field of agriculture due to environmental crises the position of employment fell by 4 millions in 1980 then remained constant for 10 years and declined by 1 million in 2020. Although, the in industrial area the increasing rate of machines declining job oppurtunites in manugacturing theregore, the strenth jobs in 1980 was 15 millions and fluctuated once as well as went to 12 million in 2020.
On addition, the employment increased drastically between year 1980 to 2000 from 6 millions to 15 millions in retail sector with 14 millions in 2020 repectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to report the main features and trends across the four sectors shown in the graph. An overview is present, although it contains speculative reasoning outside the data such as 'due to advancement in technology'. While some key data points are mentioned, such as the rise in retail and healthcare, there are notable misreadings and inaccuracies in the figures. For instance, the text claims that healthcare started at '2 millions' and 'slightly rose up by 3 millions in 1980' (actually 5 millions in 1980), and that agriculture fell by '4 millions in 1980' (which would be impossible given the starting value of 6 millions). Furthermore, the summary lacks a comprehensive comparison across all periods. These errors place the response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the structure is awkward and unconventional, featuring a single-sentence paragraph starting with 'Overall. it si clear'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Having a myopic glance', 'Although, the in industrial area', and 'On addition'. The progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor referencing and mechanical transitions. While the text has a discernible introduction, body, and conclusion-like structure, the lack of smooth logical flow and inappropriate cohesive markers keep this criterion at a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited and minimally adequate vocabulary range for this task. There are several inappropriate word choices and spelling errors, such as 'healtcare', 'incremented', 'oppurtunites', 'manugacturing', and 'strenth'. Phrases like 'myopic glance' are unnatural and incorrectly used in this context. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to the economy and employment sectors, frequent errors in word formation and spelling cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning with the Band 5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to ungrammatical constructions. Examples include 'Although, the in industrial area the increasing rate of machines declining job oppurtunites in manugacturing theregore, the strenth jobs in 1980 was 15 millions and fluctuated once as well as went to 12 million in 2020', which contains multiple fused clauses and missing verbs. Frequent errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions are present throughout the text and frequently impede communication, fitting the Band 5 descriptor profile.
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