Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the line graph shows that the amount of numbers of jobs in the economy of us in the four sector between 1960 and 2020.manufacturing increase 15 to 20 from the 1960 and 1980.manufacturing job was highest in 1980 and lowest in 2020.retail jobs are highest in 2020 from 2% to 16%.
retails jobs and manufacturing jobs was same percentage in 2020 which is 16.healthcare jobs are lowest in 1960 which is 2%.agriculture jobs was high in 1960 which is 5% and they were remain same in 1980 and 2000 and lowest in 2020 which is below 3%.
retail and healthcare jobs was increases lowest to highest towards the years.agriculture jobs were decrease high to low and manufacturing jobs are flacuating acording to different variations.in 1960 that was 15% and in 1980 that was 20,in 2000 they were below 20 and in final year manufacturing jobs were below 15.
overall,retail and healthcare jobs were low to high and agriculture was faling high to low.manufacturing jobs were different varriations low to high and again just faling till final year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the four economic sectors shown in the line graph, identifying highs and lows such as manufacturing peaking in 1980 and retail reaching its maximum in 2020. However, the student struggles significantly with accurate data reporting, frequently confusing millions of jobs with percentages (e.g., stating retail went 'from 2% to 16%'). Furthermore, some data points are misread or vague, such as stating agriculture was 5% in 1960 and below 3% in 2020 when the chart clearly shows absolute numbers in millions (6 million down to 2 million). While an overview is attempted at the end, the frequent data inaccuracies and confusion between absolute figures and percentages pull the score down to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, with almost the entire text clumped together into one block of sentences, and a final brief paragraph acting as an overview. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and mechanical, relying heavily on simple lists of data points rather than smooth transitions. Although there is a discernible attempt to structure the response by moving through time and sectors, the lack of clear logical progression and inadequate cohesive referencing impede readability. Pronoun referencing is weak, and sentences often feel disjointed. These limitations place the response firmly in the Band 5.0 descriptor category.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'jobs', 'sector', 'highest', 'lowest', 'increase', and 'decrease'. There is an absence of less common lexical items appropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. Moreover, there are persistent word-formation and word-choice errors, such as using 'flacuating' instead of fluctuating, 'acording' instead of according, and 'faling' instead of falling. The misuse of percentage units ('2%') instead of millions severely limits precision. The lexical range is minimally adequate for communicating basic data points, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that result in heavy errors, such as 'the line graph shows that the amount of numbers of jobs...' and 'retail jobs are highest in 2020 from 2% to 16%.' Punctuation and capitalization are frequently neglected (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters, missing spaces after commas). Subject-verb agreement errors are common, such as 'manufacturing job was' and 'retails jobs and manufacturing jobs was same'. These frequent structural and mechanical errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 5.0.
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