Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table elaborates the information of economic growth in the American state in the 19 and 20 centuries .In the manufacturing side the jobs are increses from 15 to 20 million and then decreses from 20 to 13 and finally down to 8 millions.The retail jobs are also abundant in the year of 1960 to 2020 but indicates slight decrease in the final 10 years. In the side of agriculture there is gradual changes in the number of opportunities in the duration of sixty years . But in the field of health care it consists a sudden fall in the duration of 10 years and jobs also fall from 5 million to 1 million and almost finished.Overall table indicates the greatest opportunities in the fields of Agriculture and retail which provides an abundant of chances for candidates to take chance and make sure there jobs . The economy of the all sectors improve and decreases by half due two strong fields and two weak sections.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by describing economic sectors, but it fails to accurately report the data shown in the line graph. For example, the student writes that manufacturing jobs went down to 8 million, whereas the graph indicates 13 million in 2020. Furthermore, the description of healthcare and agriculture contains severe misinterpretations of the visual data, stating that healthcare jobs fell to 1 million and almost finished, contradicting the upward trend to 16 million shown on the graph. The overview is also inaccurate, incorrectly claiming that agriculture had the greatest opportunities. Because the content lacks factual grounding in the source material and misinterprets key trends, the score reflects a lower band according to the descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks clear logical organization and progression. There is a complete absence of proper paragraphing, as the entire response is written as a single block of text (or broken by faulty spacing). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'In the manufacturing side' and 'In the side of agriculture'. The transitions between sentences are abrupt, and referencing is often unclear, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow. The conclusion contains contradictory statements that disrupt the logical flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include 'economic growth in the American state', 'manufacturing side', and 'make sure there jobs'. The student attempts to use some less common words, but spelling mistakes (e.g., 'increses', 'decreses') and awkward phrasing ('abundant of chances') restrict the lexical range and occasionally impede communication. The terminology relating to graph description is largely absent or misused.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures that are frequently marred by basic errors. There are numerous tense inconsistencies and agreement errors, such as 'the jobs are increses' and 'it consists a sudden fall'. Punctuation and article usage are also problematic throughout the response (e.g., 'due two strong fields'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when simple sentences are used, they still contain persistent errors that strain the reader's understanding.

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